Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health.Do you agree or disagree?

It’s true that many people think those products which have been proved to be harmful for people’s health should be banned in stores. While I agree that some food or drinks are not very healthy, I believe that it is not feasible to omit those food or dink from our daily diet.

There are several reasons why those food that do harm to our health should not be sold to people. It’s evident that unhealthy diet could increase the risk of misfortune to illnesses, according to some scientific researches. For example, people who engage with laborer jobs are more likely to have some energy drinks to boost their power in short period of time, like red bull. In fact, those functional features making people feel vigorous normally result from undermining our heart relevant health system as well as blood curriculum. In addition, there’s no doubt that a variety of additives contained into the food and drinks can be another major cause degenerating our state of health.

However, some food can be minor threats to our body, we still can get along with them by control of overtaking. Firstly, the aspiration for the food processed with strong taste or heavy oil is inborn trait embodied into human being. When we are in the state of less energetic, a great fullfilment and satisfactory could be gained from the food with high calorie, even the negative effects might outweigh the positive ones. Secondly, if people could be given a reward, like drinking a bottle of sprite after a long-haul jogging, they would have seen a possibility of a continuing good performance. Finally, it’s not wise to impose an unrealistic solution to forbidding the products, by contrast, the significance of self-discipline and persistence of doing exercises can’t not be emphasized too much.

In conclusion, although the views of some unhealthy food should not be accessed by people at shops, we should not merely attribute the responsibility to food but forget about that of people’s.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this food' or 'those foods'?
Suggestion: this food; those foods
...believe that it is not feasible to omit those food or dink from our daily diet. There a...
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Line 3, column 31, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this food' or 'those foods'?
Suggestion: this food; those foods
... diet. There are several reasons why those food that do harm to our health should not b...
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Line 3, column 352, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...gy drinks to boost their power in short period of time, like red bull. In fact, those function...
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Line 7, column 71, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ews of some unhealthy food should not be accessed by people at shops, we should n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in short, no doubt, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08181818182 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80285994568 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615151515152 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 32.815424285 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3846153846 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6923076923 7.06120827912 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42054110553 0.244688304435 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144638031911 0.084324248473 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894344323804 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289741116452 0.151304729494 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632167904147 0.056905535591 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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