Students’ grades are the most important measurements to show their performance at school. Normally, good performance means good grades, if they study hard, they probably get ideal grades in test. Obviously, all parents want their children concentrate on study and get great grades, but how can parents motivate their children to learn? In my opinion, parents can reward their children some money, if they get good grades in tests. Following is my elaboration of my view.
Getting great grades is beneficial to the development of children in the future. Good grades at high school mean students can study a good university in some extent. As we all know, all students in china must take the college entrance examination, and the result of this examination directly determines what kind of university they can attend, which means that top students can go to top universities which may make you get a better development and find better jobs in society. So it’s important for students to get good grades. In this time, parents give their children money, which will encourage they to study harder and pay more attention on learning. Consequently, children gradually get accustomed to studying, and get great grades in a long time. So it’s necessary for parents to reward their children.
Studying how to manage money is requisite and difficult for all people in society. When children get money from their children for their grades, they have to face a problem that how use this money earned through hard study in school, just like that adults need to reasonable use their salary to make a living. Earlier to face this problem and learn how to fix it by themselves are beneficial for them to get the ability to manage money. For instance, my girlfriend writes her all expanses and money that her parents gave her at high school, which make her know exactly her own consumption so that she can manage her money well and never encountered financial problems. Unlike me, I always spent all my money early and fell into economic crisis. Overall, it’s good that parents reward their children for children’s good grades.
Admittedly, by giving children money for their high grades may cause some bad effects on children, including changing their perspective on learning that studying hard is only to get rewards. However, in a long run, children, who get rewards for the high grades, will understand the meaning of study and most of them will get fair grades which is helpful for them. Nonetheless, I believe that parents should reward their children's good results in school.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, well, for instance, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03488372093 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65491472578 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460465116279 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.4161620087 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.095238095 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4761904762 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426691243127 0.236089414692 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157804085138 0.076458572812 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799101775215 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.313920869109 0.150856017488 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197048643494 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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