Eating too much sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption while others think that it is individual’s responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It has been proved that sugar has detrimental effect on body and one should not consume sugar in excess. People vary in opinion about who should be responsible controlling the consumption of sugar. A section of the society believes that the Governing body should have the responsibility to check on sugar consumption; while, some people believe that it should be controlled by individual efforts. However, I strongly support the former group as the Government has the wider scope of limiting the sugar in the country and has authorisation to make it difficult for individuals to consume it in excess.
To begin with, the government has full authority to control the sugar utilisation in the country. In other words, being administrative body, he can pass the laws such that people may find difficulty on purchasing sugar in the market. This can be done by increasing tax on sugar production. Admittedly, due to high price on sugary items, everyone would not find such items affordable and would look for other options. Unequivocally, high tax would result in sugar production and hike in sugar prices which would make is less attractive choice among the people to buy and eat. Consequently, the sugar consumption would decrease gradually in the population.
Another reason for making the government responsible for sugar consumption is because he has wider access to the country's population. The administrative department can bring awareness among the people more effectively as their advertisements or campaign reaches all the citizens across the country. In this way, higher authorities can make them aware of health hazards due to over-consumption of sugar. For example, diseases such as obesity and diabetes are caused due to excess sugar in the body.
In conclusion, I pen down saying that the government of the country is the prime body that can keep the check on sugar consumption in the country by making it less available in the market and running awareness programmes. As the government addresses the whole nation, he can do this efficiently.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, look, may, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17365269461 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01675196646 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505988023952 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8842598747 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333302508954 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118440310121 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571357647564 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19748724561 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0770821839409 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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