Tpo 15
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In contemporary, everyone has kind of scrimmage with financial problems somehow. These problems often caused by governments, economic downturn or even the sense of rivalry among people, since, in my point of view, teaching people who to govern their money to deal with these probable situations from their childhood is essential. To illuminate more my claim, I'm going to express my idea with two clarifying reasons.
The first reason which deserves to collaborate here is that these children presumably have a better financial situation in the future. It's due to their high perception of income and expenses. They probably know how to manage their money to buy essential things, have enough saving and deposit without going under any financial obligations. Recently, study center of Tehran University has carried out extensive research about children who forced to work beside their education, thus, engage with financial management from their childhood have much more chance to be successful in their professional life in adulthood. Consequently, owing to the fact that children who learn how to manage their money in childhood, in most cases, eventually, have a better financial prospect.
Another reason which I'm intended to point out is that children who learn how to govern their own money, have better luck to survive in unsustainable economic situations. Nowadays, due to some events, such as war, natural disasters, dictatorship, sanctions and etc. people experiencing a variety of economic problems, and those who learn how to lead their earning and expenditures will survive from these harsh situations. For example, my father who forced to work hard to be able to pay living expenses of his mother and younger siblings because his father passed away when he was just a child. Although it goes back to many years ago, he knows how to manage our living expenses in the present time that our country is under severe sanctions of U.S and value of our money plunged more than three times.
In summary, according to the aforementioned support paragraphs, I definitely speculate that teaching children how to control their money is really essential to be successful in their future life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, really, so, thus, for example, in summary, kind of, such as, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24079320113 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77826425256 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56940509915 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.3137215391 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.142857143 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2142857143 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182092381314 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068347883188 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461413083937 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114918711676 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399316288172 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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