Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, taking risk plays a key role in an individual's success. Some people believe that living uniformly without taking risk is more likely to cause a welfare life. Others, however, advocate the idea that taking reasonable risks in proper situations lead to prosperity. I personally, concur with the later. The ensuing paragraphs will elaborate on this claim.
To begin with, taking rational risk cause to break free from average. In other word, people who are ready for using rare opportunities that occur scarcely could obtain whatever they want with less attempt. These opportunities may be unforeseen for those who live routinely. Therefore, risk making could decrease the time needed for forming a calm life. North worthy statics reveal that there is a significantly high positive correlation between taking reasonable risk and being prosperity. This is show how risk making increases the speed of obtaining a goal.
Second, if a person defeats as a result of risk making, he or she can analyze the reasons that caused failure and immediately after that choose a better way. As opposed to a person who work slowly to make sure that everything is correct in his mine because in the latter situation he loses his life time, so he does not have any time to modify his wrong way. In other word, people who live normal life lose their chances for progression in youth. There is a tangible example to illustrate this. I can recall my brother searching for finding job. First, he employed in a company with low constant salary. After one year, he understand that he cannot reach his aims with this smooth life. Therefore, he decided to start his own business. He get big lone and hired lots of workers. His decision was very risky but everything worked out well for him. After one year, he became one of the wealthy people in our country because of his reasonable risk. All of his friends admired him because of his proper risk making. My brother tells me had I not took such risks; I would have probably not successful like now.
Therefore, it is my opinion that risk making is one of the pivotal factors in prosperity. By taking rational risks you can pave your life way with less work, try different ways, and select the best one that ends to success rapidly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ays, taking risk plays a key role in an individuals success. Some people believe that livin...
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Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...se in the latter situation he loses his life time, so he does not have any time to modify...
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Line 5, column 624, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'understands'.
Suggestion: understands
...low constant salary. After one year, he understand that he cannot reach his aims with this...
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Line 5, column 740, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...e decided to start his own business. He get big lone and hired lots of workers. His...
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Line 7, column 233, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... best one that ends to success rapidly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81329923274 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48911787039 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601023017903 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0615695155 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.3846153846 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0384615385 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26923076923 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170422647537 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448158505586 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382333003907 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11211791379 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297692518598 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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