TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task
The reading and lecture are both about possibility of extinction of the bees. The author of the reading feels that there are three explanations for the doubt of the theory. The lecture challenges the claims made by the author. He is of the opinion that three explanation of the theory is a skeptic.
To begin with, the author argues that no fossilize had been found of the actual bees about 200 million years ago. The article mention that may be for some reason it could not possible to preserve. The specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. He claims that for preserved the fossilize needed a specific type of plant liquid. It is possible that that type of the plant was not exited in that time. Additionally, she says such type of tree may exist in 200 million years later.
Secondly, the writer suggests flowery plants not exit of that time. The relationship between the bees and flowery plant is very close and mutually related to biological relation. In the lecture, however, rebuts this by mentioning that it is possible that bees of that time depend on the other plants like pine. He elaborates on this by bringing up the points that it is also possible that bees later evolve to the flowery plant.
Finally, the author posits that fossilize that had been found is very close to the structure of the modern bee. Moreover, in the article, it is stated that the spiral pattern of the nest chamber is very close to modern bees. In contrast, the lecture's position is that for protecting the spiral pattern the bees used a special kind of waterproof material. when the fossilize is analyzed it proved that it contains the same chemical composition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 174, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...planations for the doubt of the theory. The lecture challenges the claims made by t...
^^^
Line 5, column 280, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... lecturer. He claims that for preserved the fossilize needed a specific type of plant liquid....
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 356, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
... a special kind of waterproof material. when the fossilize is analyzed it proved tha...
^^^^
Line 13, column 356, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “when” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... a special kind of waterproof material. when the fossilize is analyzed it proved tha...
^^^^
Line 13, column 361, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ecial kind of waterproof material. when the fossilize is analyzed it proved that it contains ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, in contrast, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78275862069 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48697917127 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479310344828 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 427.5 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.9118752459 49.2860985944 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.0555555556 110.228320801 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1111111111 21.698381199 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 7.06452816374 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.27373068433 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0683455596432 0.272083759551 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0226103707139 0.0996497079465 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0276124453575 0.0662205650399 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0388364528915 0.162205337803 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202999833851 0.0443174109184 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.3589403974 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.2367328918 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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