TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task

The reading asserts that, there is a theory asserting bees were not exist as early as 200 million years ago. Since, fossil structures resemble bee nests have been found inside 200-million-year-old tree in the united states. But, skeptics believe these fossils were not created by bees due to three reasons. The lecture, however, finds this idea dubious and cast doubt on the reasons proposed by the reading passage.
The author argues that, the first reason is no fossils of actual bees have been found related to that period of time. In contrast, the lecture brings up the idea that, it is true that there are no fossils of bees, but fossils can be preserved only in a specific conditions, in fossils' resine exposed by special trees, and this type of trees become common long after fossils. Thus, due to absence of trees, fossils have been ruined.
Furthermore, The reading passage holds the view that, there were no flowering plants in order to be bees' food. On the contrary, the professor underscore the fact that, old ancient bees may have been feeding on non-flowering plants.
Finally, it is stated in the reading passage that, the structures lack some details relating to bees. And the fossilized structures were made by other insects.On the other hand the speaker dismisses this issue due to the fact that, ancient bees use kind of chemical material against water. And in the structures there is fossils' waterproofing chemical.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 69, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...ere is a theory asserting bees were not exist as early as 200 million years ago. Sinc...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...xist as early as 200 million years ago. Since, fossil structures resemble bee nests h...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 103, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...al bees have been found related to that period of time. In contrast, the lecture brings up the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 159, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: On
...d structures were made by other insects.On the other hand the speaker dismisses th...
^^
Line 4, column 312, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[3]
Message: Did you mean 'there are fossils'?
Suggestion: there are fossils
...al against water. And in the structures there is fossils waterproofing chemical.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, thus, in contrast, kind of, it is true, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1198.0 1373.03311258 87% => OK
No of words: 241.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97095435685 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57847678924 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576763485477 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 356.4 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1639376283 49.2860985944 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8333333333 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0833333333 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8333333333 7.06452816374 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0791100112198 0.272083759551 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.034594926668 0.0996497079465 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0195671428496 0.0662205650399 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0532661116542 0.162205337803 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00776434168745 0.0443174109184 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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