Without the shadow of doubt, studying hard plays an important role in succession in a future job. Some people may hold the view that prosperity in a job depends on relation to people; However, some others may take an opposite view point and believe that studying hard is an integrated part of success. I personally agree with studying hard. In the other word as far as I am concerned, studying hard is the most effective ingredient in order to reach goals. Among myriad reasons which can support my idea, I will delve into the most conspicuous ones, which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
First and foremost, now a days technological advances revolutionized peoples' life and risen professional skills. Every one need to focus on a specific area of study in order to be able to work as a tecnition. For example,right now I myself am a student at the university studying for master degree in the biggest university of Iran. At the university I study industrial engineering but this line of study it self is divided into different categories such as optimization, and management since each of these categories need specific attention allude to their vast amount of advancement due to recent years researches. The categorization of a field of study let individuals to follow their own research in the specific part and results in higher education and more knowledge about the area. So the solutions proposed to problems adventing in our new era are ore creative and results in better chances for finding a career position.
The second reason one should take into account this significant is studying hard at the university lets professors know you have the quality of hardworking. Hardworking is an essentially to success in every job. An example illustrates my reason better.Three years ago I had a friend whose name was Billy and he studied hard at the university in Iran. His supervisor noticed that quality and offered him a job in a research project he was conducting on numerical analysis for Microsoft. This project led to a new opportunity for Ali to receive an offer as chairman in Microsoft's research center since he had shown his ability to conduct superior research due to his hard working aspect. Studying hard at the university was the reason for Ali to receive such an offer and be prosperous in his life.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons and examples lead us to the conclusion that based upon the today's' lifestyle that makes higher education a necessary element for success in a job and building relation with influential people, studying hard is essential. Actually there are some other reasons and examples advocated the claim which is not mentioned above. By and large I highly recommend studying hard can help individuals to reach merits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, for example, such as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95512820513 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91058819977 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532051282051 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 751.5 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.343081625 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.95 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283141860672 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905472737208 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569533212464 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171290548172 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435411648899 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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