Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without the shadow of doubt, knowing about events around the world plays an important role in life. By watching a news channel it is easy to see that they allocate a propotion of their time to international news. As some people may prefer to follow news that affect their life on daily basis others may like to know what is happening around the world eventhough it is highly unlikely to have an influence on them. In the folowing I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons which persuaded me to put forward this idea.
First and foremost, knowning about events of the world is important for the sake of humanity. We need to know about events that have no consequence for us but we are able to help those that are facing a problem and as a result build up a better world. My personal experience is a compelling example of this situation. In africa people are battling with death as a result of food shortage which has no consequence for me but with watching kids at the age of ten who are only 20 pound breaks my heart. After watching a news about them I decided to rais a campaing in order to help them which led to feeding ten thousend african child.
Another point one should take to account this signficant is brain storming which can provides people with a better job opportunity. Knowing about events prepare the mind and can hepl to develope a new idea which can turns into advent of a bright solution to problems. For example, I had a friend whose name was Billy and he had a bright mind. He developed a mobile software in Iran which is called Snapp and is used to order taxi but the idea to develop such an application was obtained from a foreign application called Ober. He read in a magazine that such an application is highly regarded by people of London so he decided to develop one for Iranian and as a result he has a prosperous company now. He could never use Ober in Iran and knowing about it might have seemed doll to others but It was because of knowing about that event that he developed his own application.
The last but not the least is maybe the effect might not be on ourselves but those whom we love. For example knowing about events that are damaging the enviroment which are leading to global warming might not affect us but it can affect our children. So as we can see by the raise of awareness now individuals are trying to counter this phenomena but if no one knew about it, no one would have had done any act in this regard.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons and examples advocate the fact that knowing about events can lead to a new ideas and also is essential for humanity even if the event does not neccessarily have any effect of one's life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...on of their time to international news. As some people may prefer to follow news t...
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Line 5, column 478, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'pound' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'pounds'.
Suggestion: pounds
... kids at the age of ten who are only 20 pound breaks my heart. After watching a news ...
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Line 5, column 501, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... who are only 20 pound breaks my heart. After watching a news about them I decided to...
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Line 5, column 516, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
...0 pound breaks my heart. After watching a news about them I decided to rais a campaing...
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Line 9, column 86, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
... signficant is brain storming which can provides people with a better job opportunity. K...
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Line 9, column 217, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'turn'
Suggestion: turn
...n hepl to develope a new idea which can turns into advent of a bright solution to pro...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...result he has a prosperous company now. He could never use Ober in Iran and knowin...
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Line 13, column 333, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...s now individuals are trying to counter this phenomena but if no one knew about it, ...
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Line 17, column 218, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...oes not neccessarily have any effect of ones life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2211.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43975903614 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4283485465 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491967871486 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.7794143304 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.368421053 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2105263158 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.89473684211 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212444903065 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698724153978 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685746798386 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131958164638 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603951604323 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.77 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.