Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
Nowadays people are curious to travel around the world. It is said in these days Sahara and Antarctic are increasingly popular tourist destinations despite the conditions. Visiting such places can be materialistically beneficial for these countries although there are might be serious problems that massive tourism can cause.
Sahara and Antarctic are offering a pristine and sacred environment that makes people curiously travel to these countries. Sahara desert is so different from the surrounding world. It exposes people mind about a desert, an enormous sand dunes and camels they can ride with. People are desperate to try something new and this is why it makes them travel there. In Antarctic people can spend lots of money to see Antarctic penguins, cruise around and enjoy the winter wonderland there. Both countries benefit materialistically which makes them rely on tourism. For example, relying on BBC tourism is supporting the native people and keeping Antarctic funded and its preservation.
Although both of these countries are extremely sensitive to human activity. Massive tourism in Antarctica has ruined the penguins routine as people leave their footprints and throw rubbish in nature. Disrespectful and careless actions are changing these untouched countries in a negative way. In Sahara people are stepping on the plants that are under nature protection which will affect all the food chain and environment. The government should take action and limit the amount of tourism in both areas. According to the BBC, there has been an argumentation about banning tourism from Antarctica due to decreasing breeding from penguins.
In conclusion, both countries are unique with its untouched nature, they offer a lot of unseen animal species and plants. Unfortunately, mass tourism is ruining the beauty and people act disrespectfully.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53146853147 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9262475694 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58041958042 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.459341436 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.8888888889 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8888888889 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.88888888889 7.06120827912 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0838900381533 0.244688304435 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.024853863136 0.084324248473 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401707936913 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0566963535704 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670867655552 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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