Many companies provide important products and services but at the same time cause environment damages. Some people believe the best way to prevent these companies from damaging the environment is for the government to require more penalties from them, such as higher tax and larger fine. Others believe there are better ways to deal with this problem. Which opinion do you agree with and why?
With the advance of modern society, governments are attach much importance to environmental problems, which are influence for people’s daily life. People start to concentrate on global warming or some bad effects that are responsible for companies of manufacturing industry. What can be done to relieve this problem? Some people believe that the government could require more penalties for these companies. Others point out that it must have other better way to solve this problem. I, personally, think we can find better way to solve this problem.
Firstly, governments should encourage companies to protect the environment independently and consciously, like issuing certificates for those environmental protection enterprises, or public service advertisements should be put on mass media to raise public awareness of environmental protection. If companies do not produce the products of cause environmental damage, the environment would not be polluted, which can basically solve the problem. Moreover, government can use some media or internet to show public that how significant to use the environmental goods is for our society. When people understand the importance of conserve the environment, they may reduce using some product that damage our environment. For example, few days ago, I watched a Public Service Advertisements, which told us that lots of products that we use will damage the environment for our survival. Then, I knew the importance of decrease the use of goods harmful to the environment and I did reduce purchases of these products.
Admittedly, companies will pay more attention on their produced product to reduce environment damage, because of larger fine. According to this reason most companies will reduce to damage the environment. However, producing product will bring the large number of benefits for most company and these benefits are higher than fine. What will the companies do? Sometimes, they would not care about large fine and just still produce the products. So, the environmental problems would not be solved.
In conclusion, the better way is that when companies could conserve the environment independently or let public to know how environmental goods important are, which are the better way to solve the environmental problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 53, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'attached'.
Suggestion: attached
...ance of modern society, governments are attach much importance to environmental proble...
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Line 5, column 338, Rule ID: OF_CAUSE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'of course' (=naturally)?
Suggestion: of course
...f companies do not produce the products of cause environmental damage, the environment w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54700854701 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12500420045 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504273504274 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2203216084 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.473684211 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4736842105 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57894736842 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282108615379 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952523177015 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706786285415 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170512996136 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362751561671 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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