Do you agree or disagree with the following statements？ Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Doing each task completely and in a proper way is one pillar of gaining success in today's progressive world. By increasing the population there are too much competition between people in gaining jobs, as a result employees prefer to recruit people who doing their responsibilities well. Some people believe that doing many various tasks cause people to can't do it well, whereas some others hold an opposite attitude. In my view, focusing on doing one thing could have better result for two remarkable reasons.
The main reason is that doing various things decrease quality of work as people are not expert in each field. When a person wants to deal with a work, he/she should have enough knowledge on this field. By getting familiar with different aspects of each task you could easily able to complete it perfectly. For example, when I started my work in apple company, all the time I tried to be active in solving the company's obstacles in each field. Although I worked hard and doing many things to show my talent to my boss, I couldn't get a good result on my works. As went on, I learn to focus only on my responsibility and try to use my valuable information on this field to enhance my work's quality. Investing energy on few tasks in which I was expert led me to become prospers. If I had not concentrated on my own field, I would not gain any success.
Second, by doing several things people can’t pay adequate attention to each task which results in low quality of work. If people want to finish a task in high quality, they have to pay more attention in every detail of that work which take them spending much time on doing it. Therefore, people who are busy in doing divers tasks should share their time and attention between different thing that decreases their efficiency. For instance, statistics demonstrate indirect relation between number of things people involved in finishing them and the final quality of works. Researchers' investigation among two group reveal that people dealing in few tasks complete their responsibility in better quality due to not only they put all of their energy on limited tasks, but they also use more time on getting necessary information from various resources giving them comprehensive perspective of work. As you can see, undoubtedly, dealing in limited tasks provide you with better result.
In conclusion, I do believe that advantages of doing few tasks overweight the benefits of involving in several things. Not only are people not expert in each field, but they also could pay more attention on few things. I think people should understand the importance of focusing on their own field.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
Doing each task completely and in a proper way is one pillar of gaining success in tod...
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Line 1, column 354, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...oing many various tasks cause people to cant do it well, whereas some others hold an...
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Line 5, column 521, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... things to show my talent to my boss, I couldnt get a good result on my works. As went ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2211.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88079470199 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64223748812 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487858719647 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0579216919 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.285714286 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263826370002 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907609615634 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645216026012 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187420745085 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459424292683 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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