You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter - Give details of your study plans - Explain w

Dear Asal ;

How's everything going on with you? I am writing to tell you about my study plan that I told you about before. Hopefully, British Columbia University that I wars apply for the master's degree in visual arts excepted me and I should move to Toronto for next semester. I decided to start with the theoretical subjects and after that, I'll start practical subjects like sculpting or making ceramic plates and objects.

However, my family spouse to support me with tuition and another financial cost I want to find a part-time job because I need some experience in a foreign community, so after graduation, I can find a better job and stay there and maybe start my business. Furthermore, it's helped me with other costs like my study materials or books or even for food and dress.

I think it would be awesome if you can help me to find job as long as you are living there for many years and you have many friends and experience with the local communication, so I'll send you my resume in order to send them to companies may have part job part-time vacancy, it's not really important the position off work is just enough close to my university that would be great for me.

I really miss you and I hope to see you soon in Canada.

With love,

Sogol

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: How's
Dear Asal ; Hows everything going on with you? I am writ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 157, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'war'
Suggestion: war
...lly, British Columbia University that I wars apply for the masters degree in visual ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
...he theoretical subjects and after that, Ill start practical subjects like sculpting...
^^^
Line 7, column 41, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help me find' instead.
Suggestion: help me find
... I think it would be awesome if you can help me to find job as long as you are living there for...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 182, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
...rience with the local communication, so Ill send you my resume in order to send the...
^^^
Line 7, column 277, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...es may have part job part-time vacancy, its not really important the position off w...
^^^
Line 13, column 6, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...u soon in Canada. With love, Sogol
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, i think, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 5.05154639175 257% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1041.0 937.175257732 111% => OK
No of words: 229.0 206.0 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54585152838 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47224670709 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 127.690721649 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606986899563 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 325.8 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 110.554159679 44.8134815571 247% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 115.666666667 76.5299724578 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4444444444 16.8248392259 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 4.34317383033 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313028062051 0.216113520407 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121093969746 0.0766984524023 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0963121317309 0.0603063233224 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197181046489 0.12726935374 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602970494053 0.0580467560999 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 8.37731958763 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.