It is sometimes suggested that primary schoolchildren should learn how to grow vegetables
and keep animals.
Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
As a society, we try to teach our children some types of skills such as tangible skills and the ability to
perceive humanities. Some people dispute whether getting familiar our children with vegetables and
animals are spending energy and money. In my point of view, I believe that children desire a chance of
learning vegetable and animal. Without a little doubt, this pattern could take more advantages in
comparison to the disadvantages.
Undoubtedly, at an early age, the brain is at its highest state of readiness to learn and perceive every
single information like how a dry sponge behaves in facing water. Primary school is a golden opportunity
for breeding children’s pure personality. If children learn how to works with plants and understand
animals, would be very effective in the real-world in the distant future. For example, they may tend to a
private garden or be environmentalism, what our planet needs these days most, to enact some
constructive changes toward climate changes. Not only is it important as a social issue but also it has been
analysed from a psychological point of view. Teaching tangible skills such as agrarian and keeping livestock
would result in self-reliance and stronger recognition of themselves. Hence, I’m on the side of the idea of
adding such skills into the primary school’s curriculum.
Nonetheless, there are some functional problems against implementation these programs to the primary
school’s curriculum. Firstly, an increase in urbanisation and fewer farms, have an access to farmland in
order to teach children cultivating plants and experience of practical learning of animals is trouble
enacting. Secondly, bereft of the budget is not ignorable due to poor allocation of limited resources. For
instance, budget has been required in order to rent some busses to carry children. Lastly, both the
responsibility of children to taking care of them and getting parent’s permission is tough enough
individually. Taken as a whole, aforementioned remarks have reduced the feasibility of actualizing
mentioned programs.
In conclusion, It is quite important and effective if primary schools are facilitated by the program. The
personal quality of children will train in a constructive way which can be interpreted as a kind of
investment in the human race. However, governments must take an action to cover this plan by dedicating
a sensible budget and facilitate schools with necessary facilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...e in urbanisation and fewer farms, have an access to farmland in order to teach children...
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Line 24, column 41, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a constructive way" with adverb for "constructive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...personal quality of children will train in a constructive way which can be interpreted as a kind of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, may, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2114.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 387.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46253229974 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12363665351 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607235142119 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.6534567968 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.7 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.35 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 25.0 4.38176352705 571% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108904090528 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0309043495567 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283457949971 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0274838903618 0.151304729494 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373885748883 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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