The following appeared in a memo to the board of the Grandview Symphony.
"The city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony since the symphony's inception ten years ago. Last year the symphony hired an internationally known conductor, who has been able to attract high-profile guest musicians to perform with the symphony. Since then, private contributions to the symphony have doubled and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series has reached new highs. Now that the Grandview Symphony is an established success, it can raise ticket prices. Increased revenue from larger audiences and higher ticket prices will enable the symphony to succeed without funding from the city government."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The opponent have come to conclusion, that the symphony down not need funding from government any longer, since their are avalanche numbers of private contributions and the attendant of the symphony ha e double. However before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, three question must be answered.
First of all, what if the avalanche numbers of the private contributors for the symphony reduced? In other words are those private contributors going to find interest to continue contributing to the symphony? For instance if those private contributors came so much to the symphony just to look at whether the new guest invited will make a difference to the symphony, and after their first attendant decided to stop coming. If those contributors decided to stop coming that mean the symphony will still need the assistance of the government in funding it.
Secondly, will the guest that performed at the symphony continue to be present? In other words will be guest be always available to satisfy people of their requirement. For instance if the guest decided not to come to perform at the symphony, this propose to cause reduction in the private attendance and automatically negatively affected the private contribution. The absence of the guest or inability to satisfied the private contributors will affect the revenue of the symphony, and may caused them to be depending on the government for funding.
Thirdly, will the attendant at the symphony be stable at the doubled rate? For instance, if there are other interesting event, and they people unavoidably absent to give attendance to the symphony. If there are other guest performing in other places, and people find interest in attending, it will cause a drastic reduction of the attendant at the symphony and will affect the funding of the symphony.
In conclusion the argument as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the three questions above and offer more evidence(perhaps) in the form of a systematic research study, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to fund the symphony by the private contribution.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 359 350
No. of Characters: 1819 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.353 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.067 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.937 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.089 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.933 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.408 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.638 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 38, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The opponent have come to conclusion, that the symphony down not need funding ...
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Line 1, column 107, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...need funding from government any longer, since their are avalanche numbers of pri...
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Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...ding from government any longer, since their are avalanche numbers of private contri...
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Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... attendant of the symphony ha e double. However before this recommendation can be prope...
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Line 1, column 276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ecommendation can be properly evaluated, three question must be answered. Firs...
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Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...stion must be answered. First of all, what if the avalanche numbers of the pri...
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Line 3, column 368, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... will make a difference to the symphony, and after their first attendant decided ...
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Line 3, column 426, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...first attendant decided to stop coming. If those contributors decided to stop comi...
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Line 6, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...government in funding it. Secondly, will the guest that performed at the sym...
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Line 6, column 483, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...will affect the revenue of the symphony, and may caused them to be depending on t...
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Line 6, column 508, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...f the symphony, and may caused them to be depending on the government for funding. Thi...
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Line 9, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...table at the doubled rate? For instance, if there are other interesting event, a...
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Line 9, column 122, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'events'?
Suggestion: events
...stance, if there are other interesting event, and they people unavoidably absent to...
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Line 9, column 128, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., if there are other interesting event, and they people unavoidably absent to gi...
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Line 9, column 220, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'guests'?
Suggestion: guests
...nce to the symphony. If there are other guest performing in other places, and people...
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Line 9, column 253, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... other guest performing in other places, and people find interest in attending, ...
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Line 9, column 293, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and people find interest in attending, it will cause a drastic reduction of the...
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Line 11, column 45, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...onclusion the argument as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its relian...
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Line 11, column 258, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the form of a systematic research study, then it will be possible to fully evalua...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 359.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2061281337 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01337660177 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456824512535 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0733630516 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.6 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9333333333 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6 5.70786347227 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151915188948 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682053505513 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536323590356 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0999264480883 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040709539281 0.0628817314937 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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