You have had a bank account for a few years Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is 240 overdrawn and that you will be charged 70 which will be taken directly from your account You know that this information is incorrect

Essay topics:

You have had a bank account for a few years. Recently you received a letter from the bank stating that your account is $240 overdrawn and that you will be charged $70 which will be taken directly from your account. You know that this information is incorrect. Write a letter to the bank. Explain what has happened and say what you would like them to do about it.

Dear sir,
I am writing this letter in response to a letter that I received from your bank a few days ago. In the letter, it was indicated that $240 was overdrawn from my account and that is why I will be charged $70. However, I think this is a mistake from one of your employees or the computing system.

As you know, I am staying in a rented house, and my rent goes directly to the landlord's account from my account with your bank. Last month, I changed house; moreover, I wrote a letter to you for requesting not to vest the money anymore to the previous owner's account. I have got the acknowledgment from you of my application. Perhaps, this money is overdrawn from my account because one of your employees incorrectly sent the money to my former owner.

However, I will request my earlier house owner so that he returns the money. I expect you will give immediate attention to this matter.

I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours faithfully,

John Davis

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly sent the money to my former owner However I will request my earlier house ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... the money to my former owner However I will request my earlier house owner s...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, look, moreover, so, i think, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 797.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 176.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52840909091 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52471640458 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 127.690721649 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534090909091 0.622605031667 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 240.3 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 12.6804123711 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 176.0 16.3608247423 1076% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 44.8134815571 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 797.0 76.5299724578 1041% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 176.0 16.8248392259 1046% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 46.0 4.34317383033 1059% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.469035056239 0.216113520407 217% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.469035056239 0.0766984524023 612% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0603063233224 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23967218758 0.12726935374 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12048567271 0.0580467560999 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 87.9 8.37731958763 1049% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -90.24 70.7449484536 -128% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 3.82989690722 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 69.6 7.45979381443 933% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.18 8.71597938144 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 15.06 7.59969072165 198% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 52.0 8.62886597938 603% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 72.4 8.54432989691 847% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 88.0 8.15463917526 1079% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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