If you want to change one aspect to improve your health, which would you choose? Why?
The kinds of food you eat
The amount of exercise you do
The amount of stress in your life
Health has been one of the most, if not the most, crucial aspects of life, and I think it would remain a priority to everyone. We can observe its significance by seeing how the salary of doctors is increasing each year. In this regard, While some people think that food or exercise may have more effect on improving one's health, I believe that stress is a more critical factor. I have several reasons for my opinion, which I will explain in the following essay.
First and foremost, soothing stress can increase productivity and, consequently, increase income, which directly affects health. To be specific, these days even health can be assured by giving lots of money. If one can provide enough cash, the best doctors in the world will be available to them. In addition, having stress kills one's productivity. Therefore, if people relieve their work and family stress and focus on essential things in life, in the long run, they would be able to live a healthier life since professionals are available to consult them. My uncle's experience is a compelling example of this. When he had colorectal polyps in his colon, he immediately needed to afford 50K for doctors to be cured. He could afford that money, and doctors finally saved him. Had he not worked enough, which is impossible when under tremendous stress, he could not have afforded it.
Second, stress itself is the leading cause of many diseases. To elaborate upon, today, many conditions such as heart attack, the world's second cause of death, are directly related to having stress. Also, one can easily relieve their stress by getting out of the hustle and bustle of the city. My example may shed some light on this. I, being 30-years-old, struggled with asthma. Being constantly under treatment, doctors advised me to go into nature and breath excellent and clean air. Doing so could also make my condition more controllable to such a degree that I do not need to wear a particular mask every time I am going out. I think this example justified my point.
In sum, with all this taken into account, I do believe that soothing stress can be a better choice on the grounds that having stress itself is the cause of many diseases. Additionally, relieving stress can make us more productive. I hope that anyone can use this technique to improve their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, i think, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8125 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56128751803 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5725 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.9666658769 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.2083333333 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116259377273 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0336607577963 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334509743074 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0804292482693 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313184463411 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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