Nowadays people have cosmetic surgery to improve life. Why do many more people choose these operations ? Do you think this is a positive or negative development ?
In this day and age, thanks to the advancement of technological devices, some people are inclined to undergo body enhancement through surgeries to better their appearance to become more attractive. From my perspective, the culprits leading to this tendency are various, however, I believe this trend possesses more drawbacks than positive points.
On the one hand, some individuals desire to have an appearance like the celebrity in the commercials and decide to take a surgical procedure to alter their appearance till it resembles their idol. This leads to the overusing the rhinoplastic is considered to harm people's physical and mental health. Should they do not satisfy with their beauty after the surgery and continually make an operation to change their body, they may suffer from the worst health risks and long-term consequences. Take Versace Donatella as an example, she used to be a fashion designer whose an elegant beauty, but after undergoing several times of aesthetic surgery, her face becomes broken out and has many side effects for later future. Thereby, taking a face-life should be considered wisely and considerably for those who have an intention to alter their body through operations.
On the other hand, it is believed to gain the self-esteem of individuals through breast reduction. Those who had faced the incidents like acid attacks or traffic accidents might choose esthetic surgery to cure the wound of these accidents caused. For instance, Lan Vy was the victim of an acid attack caused by her husband, and thanks to the proficient beauty surgeon, she now possesses confidence and her wound has recovered after the operation.
In conclusion, although the benefits of transformation of appearance through physical treatments can not be ignored, it still exists potential disadvantages to those who opt for reconstructive operations. Nonetheless, from my view, this trend has more drawbacks than upsides, and I believe that the natural beauty is the most gorgerous and attractive beauty in human life
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but, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1714.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32298136646 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92312416996 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596273291925 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.0906176581 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.833333333 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147732014783 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0522746217606 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424051694135 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0848641027113 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462767863977 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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