Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People can't be happy with what they have; they always want something new or different. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We are living in a world of technological advancement, and it has impact on human lifestyles and goals. Availability of different knowledge and possibilities lead to further improvements in a variety of fields including feeling of happiness in human beings. I think modern people always wants more than they have. I will broach some reasons that validate my opinion.
To begin with current world keeps improving every day and some people keep their hand of the pulse and cannot be happy until they are on the same speed. The youngest generation is more focused on social media and new technology to have convenient life. It seems a standard of today's world to gain the latest version of the iPhone or a car. So, people tend to be in a trend and forget their inner wishes and state. They usually forget some essential things in life like family and self-realization. It is a usual state of mind to be happy you need to be alike everyone around you in the society to fit in. But when the day is over, we all go back to our place to spend the evening with our family or alone just to rest. The cell phone is such a distraction from a real life. I believe after some time this generation wakes up from their unstoppable race for something more or new and realize that they have lost time for pretending but not to living their lives.
I have a strong feeling that only when you have a dream job and a family you can be the happiest person. Chasing gadgets or more money will not bring you joy from life. Only emotions can stick in your head and seed happiness in your heart. Finding your calling is the most important thing to do when you are young. We spend a lifetime working to cover our living expenses so it is crucial to love your job, that is what can make you happy, not a new laptop. I used to search myself for a while and I was not really happy earning money and buying staff on the contrary when I have found my biggest interest in science, I have found my happiness. Happiness is not about what you can buy, or have it been about how you feel while your daily life. It is obvious that people attracted with the advertisements of a new technologies when they should aim to find what they like to do in a professional field.
As mentioned, we can see current tendency for racing simultaneously with the world development, but it leads to one conception in people's life they forget about themselves, what their deepest will is. The illustrated examples above can shed a light on my point of view. The nowadays world distract people with the unnecessary things that is why most people cannot be happy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 813, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'technology'?
Suggestion: technology
...racted with the advertisements of a new technologies when they should aim to find what they ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, while, i think, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46443514644 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53683840588 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7321392113 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9166666667 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9166666667 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.79166666667 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367459241277 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925339371733 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654950871146 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209426716257 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585297370096 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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