"In an effort to improve our employees productiviy , we should implement electronic monitoring of employees internet use from their workstations.Employees who use the internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities,such as shopping or playing games.By installing software to detect employees internet use on company computers,we can prevent employees from wasting time,foster a better work ethic at climpson,and improve our overall profits".
The letter sent by the vice-president to the president includes a recommendation about the implementation of internet usage detection software of the employees.However, there are still a lot of questions which remain unanswered regarding the recommendation.The recommendation requires too many assumptions regarding the implementation of software and thus raises a lot of questions.
The vice president recommends a software to be installed to identify the employees internet usage so that they can punish the employees who spend a lot of time in recreational activities like shopping, playing games etc.But whether the software will be able to detect internet uage properly still remains a mystery.The software may not be able to give accurate data regarding internet usage.The software may have a function which allows employees to disable the internet usage detection functionality.The software may give wrong information regarding the internet usage detection by their employees and thus more information should be given to infer that that the sofware does not suffer from egregious errors and provides accurate and sufficient information to the company's administration.
It is mentioned that by installing the software one can reduce the number of hours one spends on gaming, shopping etc.but it may be possible that may waste time by playing games,doing shopping from their mobile phones via internet of their own phones.In this case the software installed on their workstations will not be able to identify them and thus it will not help identify employees wasting time on the recreational activities.
The installation can in a way helps in reducing the number of hours one spends on shopping,gaming etc but there is not sufficient information by which employees can be prevented from wasting time.The installation of software cannot necessarily foster a better work ethic as there is not any concrete information given.
The installation of software for identifying internet usage of employees cannot necessarily improve overall profits as the information to buttress this argument is not given in a concrete manner.There can be other better ways to improve the profits of the industry.Therefore,the letter should include sufficient information to bolster the information given regarding the implementation of the internet usage detection software.
The vice president in order to sound cogent should subsume information in a more concrete and not in a hypothetical manner.The recommendation made here is weak as it requires too many assumptions.Therefore, the recommendation made here suffers from many setbacks and these setbacks should be addressed in order to sound more persuasive.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.262910798122 0.25644967241 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.19014084507 0.15541462614 122% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0821596244131 0.0836205057962 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0657276995305 0.0520304965353 126% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0234741784038 0.0272364105082 86% => OK
Prepositions: 0.110328638498 0.125424944231 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0633802816901 0.0416121511921 152% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.53840001328 2.79052419416 127% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0328638497653 0.026700313972 123% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.112676056338 0.113004496875 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0446009389671 0.0255425247493 175% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0117370892019 0.0127820249294 92% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2711.0 2731.13054187 99% => OK
No of words: 408.0 446.07635468 91% => OK
Chars per words: 6.64460784314 6.12365571057 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.416666666667 0.378187486979 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.350490196078 0.287650121315 122% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.301470588235 0.208842608468 144% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.19362745098 0.135150697306 143% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.53840001328 2.79052419416 127% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 207.018472906 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.414215686275 0.469332199767 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.9362395629 52.1807786196 84% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 20.039408867 30% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 68.0 23.2022227129 293% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 158.387446893 57.7814097925 274% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 451.833333333 141.986410481 318% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 68.0 23.2022227129 293% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.5 0.724660767414 207% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 3.58251231527 642% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 103.049019608 51.9672348444 198% => OK
Elegance: 1.56302521008 1.8405768891 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318479000238 0.441005458295 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.369040930067 0.135418324435 273% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0752973385714 0.0829849096947 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 1.0 0.58762219726 170% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 2.56395024851e-16 0.147661913831 0% => Sentences are similar to each other in a paragraph.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.198621683653 0.193483328276 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655947059721 0.0970749176394 68% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.399599327912 0.42659136922 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0789315303298 0.0774707102158 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198621683653 0.312017818177 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655947059721 0.0698173142475 94% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.33743842365 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 1.0 6.46551724138 15% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 5.0 14.657635468 34% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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