TPO12
Do you agree or disagree with following statement?
It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects to specialize in one specific subject.
Nowadays, no one can deny the importance of academic study. Some people may hold the opinion that if you gain vast knowledge from many academic subjects, it is better for you. But others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned , I agree with the second group of people because, obviously, if you focus only on one subject then you one subject, you can be a good expert on that subject. I will try to examine below the specific reasons for my idea according to which I think are the most common viewpoints today.
First let us look at what a person can typically gain from study a academic subject. By studying subject, everyone can learn any knowledge about that major that help him or her to find a good job. It goes without saying that, although knowing from any subject is helpful, learning deeply one subject is more useful and helpful for students. By way of illustration, computer industry need people who are very handy in programming. In other hand, learning chemistry or physic are not essential for getting a job in computer company.
There is also a more subtle point we must consider. If you decide study only one subject, you a comprehensive view about that you can find more idea about it. Taking my brother for example, he study only biology and he has many innovative and novel ideas and concepts about his major that helped he to do a lot of research in biology and he is studying PhD in one of the best univeristies around the word now.
Finally, I cannot oversee the fact that learning many broad subjects also means wasting our invaluable time. To elucidate on, if you want to have enough knowledge about many subjects then you need a lot aof time. Also, every subject has many aspects you might intrigued by them and then you loss many of your time. For instance, one of my friends decide to study many academic subjects in university. In contrast, I prefer to only study one subject. He does not graduated while I graduate last year.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exceptions which are escluded from the general rule, I do agree that the benfits of study only one subject is more than merits of other plan. To recapitulate the reasons, not only you can gain a good jobs by focusing on one subject, but also you have more time and ideas.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: As far as I am concerned , I agree with the second group of people because, obviously, if you focus only on one subject then you one subject, you can be a good expert on that subject.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a numeral, cardinal
Suggestion: Refer to you and one
about that major that help him
about that major that helps him
Sentence: Taking my brother for example, he study only biology and he has many innovative and novel ideas and concepts about his major that helped he to do a lot of research in biology and he is studying PhD in one of the best univeristies around the word now.
Description: The fragment he study only is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace study with verb, past tense
Sentence: To elucidate on, if you want to have enough knowledge about many subjects then you need a lot aof time.
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a comma
Suggestion: Refer to on and ,
you might intrigued by them
you might be intrigued by them
benfits of study only one subject is more than
benefits of study only one subject are more than
Sentence: Taking my brother for example, he study only biology and he has many innovative and novel ideas and concepts about his major that helped he to do a lot of research in biology and he is studying PhD in one of the best univeristies around the word now.
Error: univeristies Suggestion: universities
Sentence: To elucidate on, if you want to have enough knowledge about many subjects then you need a lot aof time.
Error: aof Suggestion: of
Sentence: Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exceptions which are escluded from the general rule, I do agree that the benfits of study only one subject is more than merits of other plan.
Error: benfits Suggestion: benefits
Error: escluded Suggestion: excluded
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 1836 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.446 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.333 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.887 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.188 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 238, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ative attitude. As far as I am concerned , I agree with the second group of people...
^^
Line 3, column 66, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... a person can typically gain from study a academic subject. By studying subject, ...
^
Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'studies'.
Suggestion: studies
...t it. Taking my brother for example, he study only biology and he has many innovative...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 199, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...edge about many subjects then you need a lot aof time. Also, every subject has ma...
^^
Line 7, column 464, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'graduate'
Suggestion: graduate
... to only study one subject. He does not graduated while I graduate last year. Drawing ...
^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think', 'in contrast']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.192560175055 0.229887763892 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.155361050328 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0962800875274 0.0866891130778 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0678336980306 0.046263068375 147% => OK
Pronouns: 0.089715536105 0.0685040099705 131% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.133479212254 0.118717715034 112% => OK
Participles: 0.035010940919 0.0351676179071 100% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.4301257609 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.019693654267 0.0309702414327 64% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0678336980306 0.0887237588012 76% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0240700218818 0.0209618222197 115% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0109409190372 0.0139019557991 79% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2305.0 2387.08602151 97% => OK
No of words: 414.0 408.028673835 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56763285024 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.285024154589 0.338922669872 84% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.219806763285 0.251872472559 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.166666666667 0.174417080927 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0724637681159 0.112833075102 64% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4301257609 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514492753623 0.524397521467 98% => OK
Word variations: 57.5985237316 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.7142857143 20.5533526081 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3873291422 48.84282405 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.761904762 120.699889404 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 20.5533526081 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.714285714286 0.644075263715 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 41.6949620428 45.7405998639 91% => OK
Elegance: 1.15384615385 1.45489161554 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373827322563 0.300154397459 125% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0769007291278 0.103427244359 74% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0802019082325 0.0752933317313 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.446856844685 0.497263757937 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.167716188283 0.151897553556 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1229598536 0.114077575197 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711603573538 0.0781384742642 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.249654097601 0.336927656856 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0513454630212 0.067059652881 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233172548686 0.210909579961 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0778771653114 0.0618886996521 126% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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