The following appeared as part of an article in the business section of a local newspaper:
“Motorcycle X has been manufactured in the United States for more than 70 years.
Although one foreign company has copied the motorcycle and is selling it for less, the
company has failed to attract motorcycle X customers—some say because its product
lacks the exceptionally loud noise made by motorcycle X. But there must be some other
explanation. After all, foreign cars tend to be quieter than similar American-made cars,
but they sell at least as well. Also, television advertisements for motorcycle X highlight its
durability and sleek lines, not its noisiness, and the ads typically have voice-overs or rock
music rather than engine-roar on the sound track.”
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.
The argument that unsuccessful attempt to attract motorcycle X customers by foreign company which copied same model failed because of being quieter is not entirely logically convincing, because it ignores certain crucial assumptions.
Firstly, the argument assumes that reason behind fail is company’s copied product lacks loud noise in contrast motorcycle X. actually author didn’t provide nothing else about both product that there are doubts that how Foreign company produce successfully same model. According to author’s conclusion, it is not possible to determine similarities between Motorcycle X produced in the United States and Copied model in another country. For example, evidence gives us that copied one lacks loud noise that indicate that maybe there is smaller engine displacement in the copied one and performance also affects same difference. There are price, speed, fuel consumption and purpose differences between 800cc and 1200cc engines.
Secondly, the argument never addresses brand loyalty to motorcycle X. it is a fact that this model produced more than 70 years and purchased by many generations in the United States. Companies as Ducati which produces fact motorcycles, Ferrari which produces fast and sport cars or Mercedes Benz which produce luxury family cars have long, successful reputation in this industry. A new company which produce same model will face with many difficulties when selling their product. For Example, Ducati produce X-Diavel model cruiser motorcycle more than 50 years that was choices of many bike lovers during 20th century and still it is or Mercedes Benz produce its luxury estate car S class more than 70 years and it sold millions of that car and still refresh car with some changes but many fans of car continue to buy brand new Mercedes S class.
Thirdly, the argument omits that customers thoughts about both models. Maybe Americans love an American chopper rather than foreign one or they prefer oldest version of same bike in comparing that of copied. Author’s assumption didn’t satisfy its conclusion with enough determinants to complete argument. In advertisement based on durability of bike X but cause of Copied vehicle’s fail based on its noise.
Thus, the argument is not completely sound.
The evidence in support of conclusion, using rock music in ads of motorcycle X implies that they target American bikers which from 1960s, they mostly prefer similar classic models in contrast contemporary bikes. And foreign company should produce its chopper which represent American heritage.
Ultimately, the argument might have been weakened by flaws in the argument.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 144, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'prefer the oldest'.
Suggestion: prefer the oldest
...chopper rather than foreign one or they prefer oldest version of same bike in comparing that ...
Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'third', 'thirdly', 'thus', 'for example', 'in contrast']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.327623126338 0.25644967241 128% => OK
Verbs: 0.132762312634 0.15541462614 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0899357601713 0.0836205057962 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0492505353319 0.0520304965353 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0299785867238 0.0272364105082 110% => OK
Prepositions: 0.117773019272 0.125424944231 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0214132762313 0.0416121511921 51% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76055267539 2.79052419416 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0128479657388 0.026700313972 48% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0449678800857 0.113004496875 40% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00642398286938 0.0255425247493 25% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0256959314775 0.0127820249294 201% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2663.0 2731.13054187 98% => OK
No of words: 411.0 446.07635468 92% => OK
Chars per words: 6.47931873479 6.12365571057 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.447688564477 0.378187486979 118% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.345498783455 0.287650121315 120% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.21897810219 0.208842608468 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.12895377129 0.135150697306 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76055267539 2.79052419416 99% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 207.018472906 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54501216545 0.469332199767 116% => OK
Word variations: 62.6425289562 52.1807786196 120% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 24.1764705882 23.2022227129 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.2126115314 57.7814097925 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.647058824 141.986410481 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1764705882 23.2022227129 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.941176470588 0.724660767414 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.14285714286 136% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 58.7263489337 51.9672348444 113% => OK
Elegance: 2.20202020202 1.8405768891 120% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388799515623 0.441005458295 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0702951993766 0.135418324435 52% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0549648887317 0.0829849096947 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.595398739167 0.58762219726 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.239363051315 0.147661913831 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137617285615 0.193483328276 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794878954495 0.0970749176394 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.128748822985 0.42659136922 30% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0747299855625 0.0774707102158 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203231710828 0.312017818177 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403657887176 0.0698173142475 58% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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