It is indisputable that the teacher has a great significant pivotal role in the students’ schools life not only in delivering information but also help them to acquire valuable life lessons. The issue whether students are more influenced by their teacher than by their friend or not aroused much controversy between people with different age, and different perspectives. Some contend think that the students are more influenced by the teacher due to their experience and their knowledge. In my opinion, however, I agree that the students are more influenced by their friends since they are in same age, and the teachers sometimes have no time to talk with their students.
To begin with, the students and their friends are at the same age, having the same interest, having a lot in common. They spend most of the time together even after they return home, Calling each other, or hanging out at the park together; they are taking in many subjects such as schools subjects, their daily life, their interest, and their hobbies. As the consequence, they usually imitate each other unconsciously. For instance, my little brother and his friend are both interested in soccer games and they spent almost of their spare time talking about the soccer games worldwide and great football player. My brother’s friend is a good soccer player and my brother tends to imitate his behavior. However, the teachers do not have enough time to communicate with them a lot. In my country, the teachers’ role in delivering information about subject that is it. They do not like to do a lot of effort with the students. Sometimes the teachers do not care about students’ success, and their life, the only important for them to take money from this job.
In addition to same interests between the students and their friends, an everlasting friend may have greater influence in the long run than the teacher. Some of our friends at school may become friends forever. This kind of friends will influence us even when we graduate. However, teachers, on the contrary seldom become everlasting during our lives since every year the schools’ authority change the teachers. Therefore, they will not have great influence in the long run as our friends do. Everlasting students understand each other more since they have a lot in common. Friendship is considered as motivation tools between each other to foster each other to get success within a short time. For example, I had a friend from primary schools, he is one of my best friends, he is so smart, helping me a lot whenever I need, and he used to encourage me to work hard in my work to get a high promotion. There is proverb saying” Friendship, like phosphorus, shines brightest when all around is dark” reflecting us that the friends have a great impact on the students’ life.
As all things considered, while the teacher plays an important role in our life such as delivering knowledge, and life lessons. When it comes to the influence of the friends are far outweigh than the teachers’ influence due to they are at the same ages, having the same hobbies, and the teacher can not be everlasting friends for the students since the schools changed him from year to year.
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not only in delivering information but also help them to acquire valuable life lessons.
Description: 'Not only...but also' is not used properly. can you re-write this sentence?
In addition to same interests between the students and their friends
In addition to same interests among the students and their friends
flaws:
No. of Words: 547 while No. of Different Words: 227 //it means it is wordy. Try this pattern:
Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree. (suppose we support side A)
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).
Para 3: Second, reason 2, blabla... do the same thing as First
Para 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. first,....second...However, there is no causation/relation... Still I support side A, ...first,....second...
Para 5: Conclusion.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 547 350
No. of Characters: 2580 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.836 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.717 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.482 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 141 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.792 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.524 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.542 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.464 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.155 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
It is indisputable that the teacher has ...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e no time to talk with their students. To begin with, the students and th...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'kind of', 'such as', 'talking about', 'in my opinion', 'on the contrary', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233807266983 0.229887763892 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.129541864139 0.158761421928 82% => OK
Adjectives: 0.085308056872 0.0866891130778 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0521327014218 0.046263068375 113% => OK
Pronouns: 0.085308056872 0.0685040099705 125% => OK
Prepositions: 0.116903633491 0.118717715034 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0300157977883 0.0351676179071 85% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.77573077642 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0268562401264 0.0309702414327 87% => OK
Particles: 0.00157977883096 0.00188951952338 84% => OK
Determiners: 0.101105845182 0.0887237588012 114% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00789889415482 0.0209618222197 38% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00789889415482 0.0139019557991 57% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3268.0 2387.08602151 137% => OK
No of words: 547.0 408.028673835 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.97440585009 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.48200974243 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.327239488117 0.338922669872 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.266910420475 0.251872472559 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.188299817185 0.174417080927 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.126142595978 0.112833075102 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77573077642 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438756855576 0.524397521467 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.3343785479 59.2087087015 87% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 22.7916666667 20.5533526081 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2285474525 48.84282405 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.166666667 120.699889404 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7916666667 20.5533526081 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.708333333333 0.644075263715 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 49.4827087142 45.7405998639 108% => OK
Elegance: 1.42603550296 1.45489161554 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302040697603 0.300154397459 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.154112629957 0.103427244359 149% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.120691946475 0.0752933317313 160% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.467468630395 0.497263757937 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.15391708074 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120150016601 0.114077575197 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0962732737111 0.0781384742642 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.489738320946 0.336927656856 145% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0152930378998 0.067059652881 23% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235979065241 0.210909579961 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0903381617636 0.0618886996521 146% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8870967742 151% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 18.0 8.42114695341 214% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 23.0 13.6433691756 169% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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