03/10/2017Your photograph has won a first prize in the photography competition. This will be displayed in an exhibition. Write a letter inviting your friend to the exhibition and include-what the photograph about-where did you take it-what prize you have

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03/10/2017
Your photograph has won a first prize in the photography competition. This will be displayed in an exhibition. Write a letter inviting your friend to the exhibition and include
-what the photograph about
-where did you take it
-what prize you have won

Dear John,

I am writing to invite you to share my triumph.

There was a big competition among amateur photographers in Los Angeles. People compete in several categories: portrait, landscape and wildlife. I tried my luck in all three directions and a picture of elephants that play in a river has won a prize. There are two animals depicted in the picture, one is the mother who is an enormous female and her small, recently born child. They are playing with water by their trunks: the mature creature sprayed clean water over its progeny who seems to be absolutely happy at the moment.

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Average: 9.6 (3 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear John, I am writing to invite you to share my t...
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Line 15, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.48453608247 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1219.0 937.175257732 130% => OK
No of words: 255.0 206.0 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78039215686 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77170300762 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 127.690721649 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.654901960784 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 290.88556701 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 12.6804123711 142% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2122751464 44.8134815571 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.7222222222 76.5299724578 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1666666667 16.8248392259 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.61111111111 4.34317383033 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171294113534 0.216113520407 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475157485036 0.0766984524023 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552731772538 0.0603063233224 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105049957599 0.12726935374 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646536814558 0.0580467560999 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 8.37731958763 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.85 8.71597938144 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 41.2886597938 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 8.5 out of 9 //the essay is great. make sure it is in 20 minutes.
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 255 250
No. of Characters: 1163 1200
No. of Different Words: 170 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.996 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.561 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.666 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 77 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 58 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.356 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.211 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.258 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.614 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5