You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.Write a letter to this friend. In your letterGive details of your study plans.explain why yo

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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
Give details of your study plans.
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job.

Dear John,
I’m writing this letter, to seek assistance to find a part-time job during my post graduate program. Hope you have wider knowledge about the local industries and the level of skills required for such jobs.
On Monday, September 14th, I’ll reach Toronto to join my masters at University of Toronto. As you aware, it would be difficult to manage both tuition and accommodation fees without part-time jobs. I have opted for data science, hence, looking for a company who does online survey, such jobs will aid to me to learn the course with hands on knowledge. Moreover, need your assistance to find a reputed organization in your region because I’m planning to stay with you. Furthermore, if you know any of your friends working in any firms which suits my skill set then check their work satisfaction. Additionally, please find a suitable accommodation near the campus, this will help me to transfer after the initial settlements. Also, I’d require some insight how to convert native to your local currency.
Your prompt response would help me to plan further arrangements.
Lots of love,
Jade.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 631, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'suitable accommodation'.
Suggestion: suitable accommodation
...satisfaction. Additionally, please find a suitable accommodation near the campus, this will help me to t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, if, look, moreover, so, then, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.48453608247 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 951.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 185.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14054054054 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74819018739 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.718918918919 0.622605031667 115% => OK
syllable_count: 280.8 290.88556701 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4642586453 44.8134815571 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4545454545 76.5299724578 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8181818182 16.8248392259 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 4.34317383033 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256507647738 0.216113520407 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827921865957 0.0766984524023 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531735232638 0.0603063233224 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161193985769 0.12726935374 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511279928965 0.0580467560999 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 8.37731958763 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 8.71597938144 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 41.2886597938 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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