The field of study is one the most important decision for the college student to take since it depends on many factors such as; personal interests, abilities, jobs market, and future plans. Educational institutions have to play a vital role to guide students through their counseling services to choose the field of study according to their abilities and interests, but no to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
It is highly difficult to decide the criteria to evaluate the student ability to succeed in a specific field. For instance, it is hard to estimate the aptitude of the student based on his performance in particular subjects; the world is full of successful people who didn't do very well in school. for example, Bill Gates, the owner of Microsoft Company and one of the richest people in the worlds, failed in some of the classes and he didn't do well at school. Similarly, Thomas Edison, who has numerous brilliant inventions which affected many people lives, such as the electric light bulb, which exist in almost every house around the world, his teacher considered him slow and unable to learn and sent him home, that when he was overwhelmed with his endless meaningless questions. Both examples believed in their abilities and work hard to achieve their dreams.
On the other hand, in many cases, students face several social and cultural prejudices. For example, in many middle eastern countries, people consider medical and engineering fields are the best. As a result, it is quite common to find students mostly persuaded by their parents to study these fields. In such scenarios, the educational institutions have to play a vital role to help students achieve self-understanding to take their own decisions. It is important for students to take the responsibility to choose their major according to their passion and interests, not according to the higher paying rate career or the availability of the jobs. This will increase the quality of the graduates and produce creative and passionate workers.
In conclusion, while the students need guidance to decide the field of study by the educational institutions, it is the student call to decide their future career, and it is their responsibility to success on the path they choose.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...g to their abilities and interests, but no to dissuade students from pursuing fiel...
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Suggestion: didn't
... world is full of successful people who didnt do very well in school. for example, Bi...
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Suggestion: For
...eople who didnt do very well in school. for example, Bill Gates, the owner of Micro...
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Suggestion: some
...richest people in the worlds, failed in some of the classes and he didnt do well at school....
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Suggestion: didn't
...s, failed in some of the classes and he didnt do well at school. Similarly, Thomas Ed...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...d work hard to achieve their dreams. On the other hand, in many cases, studen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, similarly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, such as, as a result, in many cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 380.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80551494871 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.4956827582 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.428571429 118.986275619 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1428571429 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5714285714 5.21951772744 203% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215252363067 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681907274843 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821074706062 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14583087318 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715848167492 0.0667264976115 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.