The aging population is good for business, the economy and society. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is irrefutable that advancements in technology and research have brought improvements and countless benefits in the level of medical care, which resulted in a longer life expectancy. There is also a highly debated issue whether this has positive impacts on the business, economy and nations welfare or it is detrimental. I will discuss both views before giving my personal opinion.
To begin with, according to some, the presence of older people in society is beneficial in all respects. For example, they have their rights to maintain their jobs, as far as they are still able to do it. Furthermore, having a broad acquaintance in the field and wide life experience, they can provide priceless training and genuine insight into the company's practices to newcomers. Finally, by still having a job, they continue to pay revenue taxes, which can boost a country's economy.
On the other hand, others opine and I agree, that the aging population is continuously increasing and this has some drawbacks in different fields. To illustrate, nowadays, the seniors working in a corporation may decide to extend their span employment due to an improved quality of life and desire to have well-paid jobs longer. As a result, this might hinder the freshly graduated youngsters' pursuits of finding a promising job, as the work positions are being held occupied. Moreover, getting old means more health problems, which needs to be dealt with and this is the responsibility of the healthcare systems. This can be achieved only by pouring more public money into the health insurance and other similar requirements, which would affect the government' budget. Last but not least, the young workforce will be overcome by elderly people, hence resulting in a decline in the national productivity in the long run.
To conclude, there are different opinions on the elderly's contributions to the community' development. However, I believe there are far more drawbacks of this tendency, as extra-medical care is needed, and they also replace the youngest in the labour market, which can result in one's country' declining economy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, well, for example, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1769.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18768328446 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88224594685 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621700879765 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.450776614 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.933333333 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7333333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111252180577 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0415642892801 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758513278967 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0679274185124 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638639175679 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.