The author has presented his argument by stating that the arctic deers living on Canada's arctic islands have changed their migration patterns across the sea due to a decline in their population. The decline in population is noticed by the local hunters. One might find the argument to be sound, but as they go through it thoroughly, they may find many loopholes which question the validity of it. The author has failed to state many crucial pieces of evidence to support his claim.
The population decline of the arctic deers is reported by the hunters. This itself is an unreliable source of information. As they hunt in particular areas that are accessible to them, they might have made that remark for nearby land. Also, the hunters may themselves be a reason for the reducing deer population. It is easy to blame a common enemy, i.e. global warming, for something that they might have done. We have seen many cases historically that overhunting has led to extinction or endangerment of a particular species. In the 19th century India, hunting of tigers was a popular sport which led to an almost extinction of the tigers. This claim by the hunters should have been thoroughly researched by the author.
As the author has written that global warming is indeed an imminent threat, it is also leading to warming up of the planet. The ice caps in the north are melting and the previously inhabitable islands covered in ice are now able to support life as they have enough water and warmth to sustain it. The deers may not have the need now to travel south for a warmer climate, as they must be getting adequate food and weather in northern regions. Also, due to an imminent threat from the hunters in the south, they may be more comfortable staying in the northern islands, than migrating south.
Evolution is a necessary part of nature for any species to survive. It occurs over long periods of time, due to changes in climate and surrounding conditions. As the climate is definitely changing rapidly these days, and also the surrounding conditions due to human intervention, evolution also needs to occur at the same pace for species to survive. We may be noticing an evolutionary change in the arctic deers, particularly in their migration patterns, as they may no longer have the need to travel south for a habitable environment. The hunters may not be aware of this and simply claimed that there's a population decline.
The author has surely made a valid point by claiming that change in migration patterns has led to a reduced population of arctic deers in Canada's arctic regions. He has given some reasons behind this claim, but they are not adequate enough to arrive at a conclusion. Major pieces of evidence are missing throughout the argument and a lack of thorough research on part of the author is evident. The author clearly needs to work more on the argument to make it significant.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 608, Rule ID: A_RB_NN
Message: You used an adverb ('almost') instead an adjective, or a noun ('extinction') instead of another adjective.
...tigers was a popular sport which led to an almost extinction of the tigers. This claim by the hunter...
Line 7, column 599, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
...e aware of this and simply claimed that theres a population decline. The author has...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2408.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 501.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80638722555 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63914678572 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467065868263 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7166825143 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.32 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.04 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.48 5.70786347227 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235279895227 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589538425488 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062737421288 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133547403086 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443316677909 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 501 350
No. of Characters: 2352 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.731 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.695 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.567 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.04 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.208 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.281 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.478 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5