Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than

Researching on foreign tribes and their lifestyle has long been a fascination with human studies. It requires intensive knowledge of human history. It takes a huge amount of time and effort to understand the lifestyle and traditions of these tribes. That is why it is a difficult field to work upon. The recommendation by some anthropologists to conduct interview-centered methods for future researches on Tertian child-rearing practices based on Dr. Karp's conclusion is not reasonable as it is based on vague terminologies and not backed by enough evidence.

Dr. Field conducted his research on the Tertian culture twenty years ago. Then the next observation was made by Dr. Karp recently. Clearly, there is a huge time gap between the two observations. In such a long duration, the tribe may have changed their habits significantly to cause a discrepancy between the two observations. There is no mention of any other research in between the time gap, which hints that the tribes may not we studied sufficiently to form such a conclusion. Also, the terminologies used by the author in this argument is vague. "Observation-centred" and "Interview-centred" methods should have been explained to give the claims more credibility.

The author states that Dr. Karp used an interview-centered method to study the Tertian tribe's child-rearing practices. By stating that the children talked more about their biological parents than other adults, Dr. Karp invalidated Dr. Field's conclusion. It's definitely possible that the children were taught about the importance of their parents and they may even be supposed to worship them, a tradition that is still prevalent in many developed communities. Thus, discussing more about their parents doesn't necessarily mean that the children were taught only by their parents. Also, it is not specified by the author how many children were interviewed and also if he interviewed the children from different islands or the same island. As traditions may change from island to island, Dr. Karp's observations cannot be given credibility without knowing the details of his research. The author should inform more about Dr. Karp's work on the islands in his argument.

As was evident earlier, much research has not been done on the Tertia tribe and the researches span over a long time. So, stating the past conclusion and its derivation method as invalid on the basis of only 1 observation is highly unwise. Recommending a particular method for future researches based on that particular observation is a bigger mistake. As is proven in the history of mankind, to understand a particular subject, different observations and diverse methods have proven highly beneficial when compared to a focussed method of observations. Thus the recommendation made by the anthropologists that to obtain accurate information on Tertial child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method is highly discouraging and should not be followed.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
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Suggestion: Thus,
...d to a focussed method of observations. Thus the recommendation made by the anthropo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, still, then, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2567.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 473.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42706131078 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.58151141386 2.78398813304 129% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475687103594 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 787.5 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.5962358917 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.958333333 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7083333333 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.5 5.70786347227 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229978860254 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632886165719 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628713179361 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123455220067 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632385322791 0.0628817314937 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 474 350
No. of Characters: 2497 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.666 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.268 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.256 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 188 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 75 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.192 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.28 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.458 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5