According to the owner of the Sunnyside towers apartment, he seemed to make a success that modified watershed in the apartment will save water. Hence he predicts that it will also be successful in the other eleven buildings. The author concludes this change will increase the profits of the company. While the assumption is problematic and we should evalutate the arguments carefully.
To begin with,the conclusion that there are few complaints and problems with this change is not convincing. Because the few complaints cannot represent all the residents' opinions about this modification. While I think almost everyone living in this aparment could notice this changing while there is also a high possiblity that they are silent majority. In the end, the number of the residents left will explain this changing's effect. Because I believe some of the people will find a better place with comfortable bathroom and kitchen. The author should take care of this modification which may cause the lost of residents in this aprtment.What's more, given this change has implemented just for a month, the latent complaint may arise subsequently in my opinion, it is too early to make this consluion of success by the onwer.
Another reason, without exhautive survey ,the author suggests to implement his measure to the other eleven apartments. This will be a dangerous suggestion while we do not know what kinds of the other residents are, who living in the other eleven buidings. Maybe they are very upset even angry with this change which may save water. While they could also choose to leave by this tricky modification. Water is used almost everywhere in our daily life, while in this kind of restriction, the effect of changing watersheds into small ones could be unpredicable. Maybe some of the people feel like this kind of method which could save money while the others maybe not.
Finally, the author refers to the possiblity of increasing profits is very high. As there are many factors relative to the increasing of profits of a company, we can not conclude this single mearsure will increase the profits. Because this modification has not been tested by the residents as we discuss previously. And I strongly predict some of the residents will leave by this seemingly little change which may destroy the figure of the company in their mind. Thus the income of the whole company will decline with the lost of residents. I would be more serious if this measure is implmented in the other eleven buildings of the company which may cause lost dramatically.
In conclusion, I fully comprehend the owner's endeavor to make more profit to the company while it is more wise to make more efforts on the service for the residents rather than saving money from them.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 464 350
No. of Characters: 2255 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.641 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.86 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.531 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.174 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.082 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.652 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.487 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...rshed in the apartment will save water. Hence he predicts that it will also be succes...
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Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...he arguments carefully. To begin with,the conclusion that there are few complaint...
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Line 3, column 109, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ems with this change is not convincing. Because the few complaints cannot represent all...
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Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...dents opinions about this modification. While I think almost everyone living in this ...
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Line 3, column 454, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...his changings effect. Because I believe some of the people will find a better place with co...
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Line 3, column 514, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ill find a better place with comfortable bathroom and kitchen. The author should ...
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Line 3, column 642, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Whats
... the lost of residents in this aprtment.Whats more, given this change has implemented...
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Line 3, column 642, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
... the lost of residents in this aprtment.Whats more, given this change has implemented...
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Line 5, column 41, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...Another reason, without exhautive survey ,the author suggests to implement his mea...
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Line 5, column 54, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggests implementing'.
Suggestion: suggests implementing
...n, without exhautive survey ,the author suggests to implement his measure to the other eleven apartme...
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Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... with this change which may save water. While they could also choose to leave by this...
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Line 5, column 565, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...small ones could be unpredicable. Maybe some of the people feel like this kind of method wh...
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Line 7, column 340, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...cuss previously. And I strongly predict some of the residents will leave by this seemingly ...
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Line 7, column 464, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...he figure of the company in their mind. Thus the income of the whole company will de...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, hence, if, may, so, thus, while, i think, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2308.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 462.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99567099567 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64539712938 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482683982684 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8741326895 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.347826087 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0869565217 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73913043478 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0439899502977 0.218282227539 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0160790430564 0.0743258471296 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432807557722 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0353758366548 0.128457276422 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364347762393 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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