In the memorandum from the business manager, it is stated that Southeast and Northeast restaurant should replace butter with margarine in order to increase profit and avoid wasting money on purchase of butter. This conclusion is based on the fact that customers in Southwestern region accepted the change without complains from most customers. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, three questions must be answered.
First of all, is the claim that only about 2 percent of the customers complain substantiated? The hundred customers reported by the argument may not be a true representative of the total customers that patronize the restaurants. For example, the hundred may be a representative of those who only visited at a particular time of the day (morning), when customers are eager to leave for work, whereas customers that come to the restaurant during the afternoon and evening are not taken into cognizance. Also, if the author’s argument is based on only a single restaurant in the Southwest region whereas there are about fifty restaurants in the region, the claim would lack adequate support. The author would need a standardized survey to be taken with a bigger sample of the customers to ascertain that they are not complains from other customers other than the two percent presented in the argument.
Secondly, are Southwestern and Southeast or Northeast comparable? In other words, can circumstances from one region be used to make generalizations and predictions about the other? It is possible that Southwestern and Southeast or Northeast are not similar at all- perhaps in the Southeast and Northeast region the cost of butter is relatively cheap as opposed to margarine. Therefore, substituting margarine for butter may not be cost effective as the author of the argument claims. If this scenario holds water, then the original argument is significantly weakened.
Lastly, do customers whose order was changed from margarine to butter satisfied? The manager assumes that customers whose order was changed were contented with the choice they were presented with. However, this might not be the case. Perhaps, the customers determined not to return to the restaurant and see no reason to complain since that would be their last time there. If the above is true, the claim that the customers cannot distinguish butter from margarine lacks adequate support.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to the provide answers to the questions above and offer more evidence by documenting its most important premise with standardized data, then it will be possible to recommend that butter should substitute margarine in Southeast and Northeast region.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 444 350
No. of Characters: 2306 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.59 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.194 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.912 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 106 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 80 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.824 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.537 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'circumstance'
Suggestion: circumstance
...rtheast comparable? In other words, can circumstances from one region be used to make general...
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Line 9, column 152, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...d assumptions. If the author is able to the provide answers to the questions above and offe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, whereas, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2371.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 444.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34009009009 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00043537003 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475225225225 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9478156889 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.55 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153305961528 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518029990497 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037079936456 0.0701772020484 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0861852565112 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041817107152 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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