The authors of the article recommend eliminating the city’s contributions to the symphony from next year’s budget. This recommendation relies on certain points: the growth of attendance at the symphony’s event, private contribution increase and announced an increase in ticket prices. The authors believe that such developments will lead to the symphony’s autonomy. However, unless certain questions are answered, this recommendation cannot be evaluated and, therefore, considered valid.
First of all, what was the reason for the public contribution increase? Perhaps, a law appeared last year that was accountable for such a change. It is entirely possible that the government obliged businesses to invest a certain percentage of their profits to the public sector. Therefore, only while this law is in power and the economic state of the city is favorable, the city of Grandview may expect stable contributions to the symphony. Another thing that should be considered is that a 200 percent growth of a negligible sum does not change the situation much. Accordingly, the authors must also provide the information of the initial contributions, so that the actual growth can be evaluated correctly.
The second question that must be answered is what is the ratio of private to municipal contributions? This is a very important point that would make the evaluation process much easier. For that matter, perhaps the ratio is 99 percent of public contributions to 1 percent of the private ones. Hence, even the increase of 200 percent in the private sector would not change the current state significantly. Moreover, the authors must also provide changes in public contributions. Did they also grow or were they reduced? Without those numbers. It is impossible to evaluate the recommendation with a high degree of certainty and soundness.
Another question to be asked is what is the pubic reaction to the price increase? Undoubtedly, price increases are never received positively by the public. Therefore, such action from the symphony may lead to the lower attendance of the events and, as a result, fewer profits. In such a situation, it will need public contributions as never before. On the other hand, we also need to know how much the prices were increased. In fact, the new prices may not differ significantly from the old prices and, therefore, this change will not affect the profitability of the symphony. With this being said, the price factor plays an important role in the evaluation process and cannot be dismissed.
In the final analysis, the recommendation is unconvincing as it stands as it lacks crucial information. Unless we have access to the answers to the above-mentioned questions which support the recommendation, it cannot be considered cogent.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 442 350
No. of Characters: 2269 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.585 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.133 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.989 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.37 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.465 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.261 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.447 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 45, Rule ID: PUBIC_X[1]
Message: Did you mean 'public'?
Suggestion: public
...her question to be asked is what is the pubic reaction to the price increase? Undoubt...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, another thing, in fact, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2359.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3371040724 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17405333377 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488687782805 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1280237435 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3703703704 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3703703704 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07407407407 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.20758483034 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219301995176 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05255076181 0.0743258471296 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599822841781 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110160095741 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0776690179865 0.0628817314937 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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