I mostly disagree with the statement, as there are some points that the author fails to acknowledge and, therefore, makes it impossible for me to agree with him or her fully.
First of all, I must agree that setting realistic goals will make them easier to follow and reach. As a consequence, the obtained result will motivate young people each time to move further and set other goals, perhaps, each time a bit more challenging. However, at the time, setting only “safe” goals which are easily reachable may affect youth’s striving for something extraordinary, for a greater version of themselves. They will be blissfully ignorant of the opportunities which are out of their comfort zone, their abilities which they have not discovered yet. To prevent this, people should be encouraged to set such goals that are potentially reachable, but also push the limits of one’s mental and physical abilities.
Secondly, to set long-term goals in our modern world may not be the best approach, as everything around us changes with the speed of light. Consider a telling example, a family that consists of generations of respected and very experienced lawyers will most likely encourage their child to pursue the same career. This boy or girl will set a goal to study hard to be accepted to the best law school, to be the best student there so that then he or she will be able to receive the desired job. But what if while chasing this goal, this person fails to notice the changes in the labor market and the country’s economy in general, where now the highest paying jobs are in completely another field, and as a result, there is an excess of unemployed lawyers. In other words, it is more reasonable and sensible to divide a big long-term goal into smaller “steps”; doing so will allow people to stay on their path to pursuing their goal, but also it will make them more flexible. If this boy or girl knew about it, they might first want to reach their goal of “being a deligent pupil” and once it is reached set a new one which corresponds with their ambitions and the current situation.
On the other hand, I agree with the author that raising children like immediate fame and recognition seekers will greatly complicate their lives and impede any attempts of trying is the first step was not successful. For example, in case of a failure which, in fact, is very likely immediate fame-seekers may lose their desire to keep going, developing and trying harder. They usually expect everything to happen fast and easily and, therefore, they are unable to invest their time and efforts in long-term undertakings. As a result, such a short-term oriented mindset will not be beneficial to young people, who are just starting their lives which are generally full of challenging situations and experiences. Unless they are prepared to face them, be realistic and patient, such young people risk falling behind our highly competitive society.
In the final analysis, it is worth noting that although young people should be encouraged to pursue realistic goals, they should be also galvanized to push their limits and leave their comfort zone in order to discover their true abilities hidden inside them. Moreover, long-term goals in our fast-changing environment might turn out to be something hazardous, instead of following small steps and staying aware of the events around you will be more beneficial.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 416, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding events'?
Suggestion: the surrounding events
...lowing small steps and staying aware of the events around you will be more beneficial.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in fact, in general, as a result, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2876.0 2235.4752809 129% => OK
No of words: 575.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00173913043 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89685180668 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76896109717 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 302.0 215.323595506 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525217391304 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 871.2 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.084600193 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.368421053 118.986275619 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2631578947 23.4991977007 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78947368421 5.21951772744 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254331853587 0.243740707755 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823104906516 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323193022536 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153017578596 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228033447008 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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