"According to a recent report by our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movi

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"According to a recent report by our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the last year. Clearly, the content of these reviews is not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not in the quality of our movies but with public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater quantity of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising."

The argument presented by the advertising director of the company is flawed as it is based on some unwarranted assumptions.Primarily,he doesnot provide and logical reasoning and proofs to bolster his assumptions.

Firstly, The writer claims that the downfall in the number of people attending the movies is because the lack of adversising. the reason for this could be the increase in amount of the ticket or the falling GDP and people would not want to spend a share of their money on leisure.Even if that is not the case, the writer fails to specify if advertising was more the previous year.

Further the arguments doesnot specifies the number of movies produced by the company this year and a year prior. The visitor could have been more the previous year because of the nuber of movies were higher.If this is true then the enire argument would fall apart.

The writer also doesnot mention the type of audience the movie produced is trying to attract .So consider if the company is producing an R-rated movie then the audience is already filtered out and which will result in less number of people the attend the theatre.If the writer would have mention and compared the type of content created throughout the year then if would have made te argument stronger.

The argument fails to provide any logical reasoning and analysis to support the claims made .

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 55.5748502994 47% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1154.0 2260.96107784 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 231.0 441.139720559 52% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99567099567 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 4.56307096286 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74522610172 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 204.123752495 57% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506493506494 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 346.5 705.55239521 49% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.506878636 57.8364921388 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.857142857 119.503703932 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 23.324526521 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165692116997 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08697395264 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635761927765 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0850074276103 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637084456142 0.0628817314937 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 48.3550499002 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 98.500998004 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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