Certain airline representatives have argued that flying is safer than driving, and they are supporting this with two separate studies regarding deaths in travel accidents, and pilots involved in road accidents. We cannot dispute with the study results; however, we can question the basis on which they have conducted the studies. While the representatives' argument is plausible, but there are some questions which they should answer to maintain its integrity.
The first study claims that every year approximately 40,000 people die in road accidents compared to 200 in flights accidents. However, the argument fails to mention how many people had traveled in flight or by car in a particular year. If we assume that in a specific year 200 people traveled by air and 100,000 of those by road, then the study result would show a completely different picture, making roads safer. Furthermore, the argument also fails to mention the number of automobiles and planes involved in the study. By a general sense, there are more cars on the road than planes in the air, and subsequently, there would be more accidents (chances of failure) on the road.
The second study result claims that the pilots are four times less likely to have accidents on the road, hence assuming that a pilot is a better driver than an average person. However, the argument fails to include the number of pilots, who were studied, and their driving habits. Pilots have a hectic job schedule, so they are driven by the airline's chauffeur and are less likely to drive around by themselves. This weakens the claim as the pilots involved in the study might have spent less time driving, making them less susceptible to accidents than an average person.
Additionally, the argument never mentions about the safety measures mandated and regulated by the government on the travel industry. The air safety measures are revised more often than road safety measures, making air travel safer over time. If the representatives prove this with evidence, then it would make their argument stronger.
In conclusion, the airline's representatives have made strong claims to prove their argument that flying is safer than driving, but their argument has failed to answer important questions on their study, therefore making their argument unacceptable as it stands.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 377 350
No. of Characters: 1895 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.406 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.027 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.592 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.562 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.919 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.356 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.563 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 341, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'representatives'' or 'representative's'?
Suggestion: representatives'; representative's
...y have conducted the studies. While the representatives argument is plausible, but there are so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16445623342 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68599303894 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488063660477 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.511313184 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.6875 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5625 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9375 5.70786347227 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180873236917 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0585603282268 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656665953995 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0982564097637 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433461183174 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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