"All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. Therefore an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem."
In this argument the author urge to consider that that in order to reduce the road accidents in Centreville the proper education of driving should be taught by the Centreville high school so that teenagers can drive safe. To support this recommendation, he states that this mandatory driving school program is the only serious solution to this problem. While some people agree to the author's claim, I find this argument not cogent and inconvenience for some reasons.
First author posits that centreville high school should give a mandatory driving lessons to all teenagers who are drivng to the school. This claim cannot be accepted as it stands. It is equally possible to state that the teenagers who will be attending these lessons might not be serious about this course and hence make a mockey of the same. Perhaps, if school make a necessary test at the end of each session then the student can take the driving lessons seriously, but nothing like that is mentioned in the argument. Also, even if the parents are busy to teach their kids about the driving lessons then it can be speculated that their close-relatives or friends cannot teach them as well. While the brief statement of attending the mandatory driving lesson at high school seems to be a robust idea, it deficit between what is stated and what is there to evidence for it and it too large to be overlooked. This, ultimately cause a week argument that will count against author conclusion.
Second, author mentioned that parents of the teenagers who are driving to school in Centerville are not financially well to support their kids with two driving schools present in their town, it does not mean that High school has sufficient find to sponsor for the driving school lessons as the hiring of driving instructor will cost money that may or may not be possible for the high school. Therefore, this assumption is unwarranted and overgeneralized and author lacks the compelling and affluent reasoning to convince that sponsored driving lesson can make a big change in reduction of accident.
However, it is true that if high school agrees to pay for the driving instructor and organizes the driving classes, school will still be needing a driving ground with traffic lights and props that are needed to perfectly train the children in accordance with the laws and regulation. So they can either take them to the nearest driving school and hire the driving groud for few hours or they have to construct the new driving ground both of which would cost exorbitant amount that might cause trouble to school's budget. Hence, the careful perusing of the evident provided in the argument reveals to many question to be left unanswered without which the reader cannot consider it to be consequential.
In conclusion, this is not a strong argument. To bolster this the author, must at very least, should provide the concrete evidence regarding how sponsored lessons provided by the high-school can be beneficial. Also, high school should conduct a survey regarding this matter asking student about the more convenient way to tackle this problem.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 521 350
No. of Characters: 2545 1500
No. of Different Words: 239 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.778 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.885 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.56 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 197 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.944 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.416 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...is argument the author urge to consider that that in order to reduce the road accidents ...
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Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...onsider that that in order to reduce the road accidents in Centreville the prope...
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Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...educe the road accidents in Centreville the proper education of driving should ...
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Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nts in Centreville the proper education of driving should be taught by the Centr...
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Line 3, column 82, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'lesson'?
Suggestion: lesson
... school should give a mandatory driving lessons to all teenagers who are drivng to the ...
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Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...datory driving lessons to all teenagers who are drivng to the school. This claim cannot...
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Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... the driving classes, school will still be needing a driving ground with traffic lights an...
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Line 7, column 600, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun question seems to be countable; consider using: 'many questions'.
Suggestion: many questions
...ent provided in the argument reveals to many question to be left unanswered without which the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, regarding, second, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2596.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 521.0 441.139720559 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98272552783 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62265369695 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456813819578 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.4671031085 57.8364921388 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.222222222 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9444444444 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164287582073 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056541022038 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435275727187 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10061843893 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213639199533 0.0628817314937 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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