Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
When reading this argument, it seems at first that the writer made a clear and detailed investigation of the decline of the Arctic deer population. However, when reading it closely, one can find many flaws to it. There is some missing information which interferes from making a connection between what the writer concludes to reality.
First, the writer mentions that according to reporters from local hunters, the deer population is declining. This sentences is missing more information regarding who those reporters are. We cannot base an argument based on something that anonymous people have mentioned. In order to strengthen the argument, information about the local reporters is required. Also, it is important to make an assumption based on experiments and people who are experts in the field and not base it on dilettantes only. Therefore, the writer should scrutinize the assumption and rely on results brought from experts only. Then, it is necessary to give details about the different reporters and the researches done.
Second, there is no information regarding the type of plants the Arctic deer eat. In order to make a connection between the decline of the deer’s population and the global warming, the writer must find a connection between global warming and the effect it has on the certain plants the deers eat. Moreover, deer are animals that adapt easily, therefore the argument should focus on explaining the reasons for having no food left for them to eat.
Third, deer are animals that have been popular for hunters. There should be a research done in the area to belie that assumption that the population decreases due to hunting. It could be that many female deer died which can bring to the decrease of deer babies. It could also be that there is a new trend which increases the desire of the Arctic deer in particular such as their skin or their horns that can be in fashion or in other industrial use. This can definitely increase the number of hunters and decrease the population a lot.
In conclusion, it could be that the decrease of the Arctic deer population is connected to the global warming, however in order to be articulate with the argument and in order to convince others, it requires a lot more details and research to be done. First, there should be some research made to explore the different plants deer can eat and the proof of global warming effect on those plants to grow. Also, hunting should be examined and there should be some kind of a follow up on the killing of the female deer. Third, experts should be the ones to conclude on the matter rather than just local reporters.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 126, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...population is declining. This sentences is missing more information regarding who ...
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Line 4, column 437, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...umption based on experiments and people who are experts in the field and not base it on...
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Line 10, column 321, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'plants'' or 'plant's'?
Suggestion: plants'; plant's
... research made to explore the different plants deer can eat and the proof of global wa...
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Line 10, column 463, Rule ID: KIND_OF_A[1]
Message: Don't include 'a' after a classification term. Use simply 'kind of'.
Suggestion: kind of
...ld be examined and there should be some kind of a follow up on the killing of the female ...
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Line 10, column 471, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...amined and there should be some kind of a follow up on the killing of the female deer. T...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, third, in conclusion, in particular, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 449.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90868596882 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60216563953 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429844097996 0.468620217663 92% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.471057884232 425% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3535532893 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.181818182 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4090909091 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86363636364 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115798884123 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372077170701 0.0743258471296 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354362241725 0.0701772020484 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0730030696442 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356410848184 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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