Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
We often think of scandals as events that satisfy people’s craving for salacious details about people’s private lives. This may be true in cases like finding out about Madonna’s adopted baby, who actually had parents who could take care of him, but who were offered money by Madonna herself. However, when scandals interfere with our politics, this can have more damaging or long-lasting effects. This is most evident in cases like presidential elections where candidates had affairs and outside romances in the past. We can see this, for example, in Israel, which is a country that is so corrupted by many delicious scandals that come out from time to time. Despite the embarrassment these scandals cause the country, they sometimes have surprisingly positive effects in raising public awareness. Awareness can result in changes that benefit society.
One example in which a horrible corruption scandal led to a positive result was when the president Moshe Katzav, was imprisoned for sexually harassing young women at work. The scandal started when his secretary complained that he raped her several times while threatening her to keep her silence or get fired. When the scandal came out other women had the courage to complain as well. After the investigation it was revealed that Moshe Katzav was a serial rapist who used his power to be with women who worked for him while being married and serving the country. Moshe Katzav got removed from office and imprisoned. This sensational story brought wide awareness to the public and other women had the strength to complain about being sexually abused by their supervisors who were investigated and arrested as well. For example, the former mayor of Jerusalem and recently the Mayor of Or-Yehuda.
Another example of a scandal that raised awareness which led to public protests and a lawsuit was about a notorious bar that was shut down after many years of complaints. For many years, this bar was a gadfly for the neighbors who complained about drug abuse and out of control behavior. The scandal that led to its shutting down happened when a person videoed the fomenting atmosphere of the staff and the guests who encouraged a young lady to drink more alcohol while being raped by many of the people celebrating there. There were also accusations against the people who stood by without doing anything. After this video came out, the girl was medically examined, and it was found that she was also drugged. There were many riots about this case which led to the arrest of the people involved in this crime and the shutting down of the pub for good. Generally speaking, this scandal has had a positive outcome since it gave society the power to demand government's involvement which created different laws regarding the responsibility of the businesses that sell alcohol and the people who witness crime.
Given these points, we can conclude that scandals sometimes lead to regulating various laws to protect society and create positive change in people’s becoming mindful of their moral obligation to stand up to wrongdoings. At the same time, we need to remember that when scandals come up some people can get extremely heart from the outcome of it. Therefore, society has to examine scandals in a painstaking way in order to protect the individuals involved.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 35.0 11.3162921348 309% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2793.0 2235.4752809 125% => OK
No of words: 550.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07818181818 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65996271645 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510909090909 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 873.9 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.740449438202 405% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3785615517 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.375 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9166666667 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 5.13820224719 331% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0952488353122 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0294019204079 0.0831039109588 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0250021156464 0.0758088955206 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0611744029841 0.150359130593 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0131157168093 0.0667264976115 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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