Argument Essay:-"For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony. Last year, however, private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series d

The memo from the budget planner states that the Grandview symphony should not be funded as they are self supporting seems to be tenable at first glance but the conclusion is based on assumptions that are not evident.

Firstly the author claims the funding to the symphony from private organisations increased by 200 percent. However, it may fail to consider whether the private organisations will fund the symphony till the end. They may find some other reliable source for funding and may divert their funds to other programs. Therefore, the author fails to provide evidence on if the private companies would provide funds to the symphony as they have not signed on any agreement.

Secondly, the author reported that attendance to the symphony’s concerts doubled. However, if the symphony always organised concert on a similar kind of music like jazz music, the audience might not be interested to attend the concert. Additionally, people’s interest tend to change from time to time. So, the author cannot expect the same trend to continue in the forthcoming years and as a result, the symphony may lose funds.

Finally, the author states that symphony has announced an increase in ticket prices. This also leads to an adverse affect on their popularity. If in the same area, another organisation starts a concert with less ticket prices, it gives a tough competition to the symphony. If the new concerts organise concerts as per majority of the people’s interests, they would definitely chose them. As a result, the symphony has to reduce the ticket prices, which eventually gives rise to an increase in need of funds.

To conclude, the author need to provide proper evidences to the given assumptions such as whether the symphony has enough money to support itself if there is no funding made available to them and also increasing the ticket prices will affect the customers or not.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 116, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...t prices. This also leads to an adverse affect on their popularity. If in the same area, ...
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Line 7, column 382, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'choose'
Suggestion: choose
...apos;s interests, they would definitely chose them. As a result, the symphony has to ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, kind of, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 314.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09554140127 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7411558979 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541401273885 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6534160546 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.666666667 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9333333333 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 5.70786347227 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304928626501 0.218282227539 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10042586312 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540515163533 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146750088425 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567629329649 0.0628817314937 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 314 350
No. of Characters: 1539 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.21 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.901 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.556 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.637 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.933 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5