"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
The author here concludes that the law which was enforced in the seaville island will play similarly in the balmer island too,without anydata or for how much time was the study done in island of seaville, he population of seaville,the number of rental stalls or much many mopeds the stalls give in a rent the main assumption of author was that the accident will occur due to the mopeds and only mopeds where used as a mode of transport so there are many assumptions that the author made which will plays an important role about the decrease in accident by 50%.
Firstly the author has not given the no of population of balmer island and the number of rental stalls of balmer island. If we dont know the population of balmer island and the number of rental stalls than how can we conclude that the accidents will reduce by limiting the mopeds rented from 50 to 25 mopeds.The author has not even stated the population of seaville or the rental companies and how much mopeds do they gave previously before the reduction law was introduced,the time period of the survey of seaville is also not given which also plays an important role for the conclusion.
Secondly, author has assumed that number of visitors in balmer island and seavile island would be same in summer.The visitors in seaville can be very less in comparison to the other seasons as the weather wont be good at that time could play a major role in the conclusion as well because the visitors would be less so the moped rentals would be less and the accident could also be less because of less polulation.So the number of population and visitors in the island plays an important role in the reduction of accidents.
Thirdly it is mentioned that the population increases by 100,000 during summer in balmer but how much was the population of balmer is not given, if the population of balmer is more and all the people who lives there has a moped then limiting the moped rented from 50 to 25 mopeds wont have a difference. If the population of balmer is more than seaville and the number of mopeds in the island is more than in seaville the number of accidents would be decreasing as the number of mopeds are more so the rental mopeds wont play as important role as the mopeds of the people who stays there.
So we cannot conclude anything from the above argument as it does not have sufficient data to prove anything as the author has made many assumptions disregarding the populations and the number of mopeds and that there are only mopeds used as a transportation facility.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 459 350
No. of Characters: 2062 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.629 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.492 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.399 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 51 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 31.5 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.48 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.734 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.188 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...lay similarly in the balmer island too,without anydata or for how much time was the st...
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... of seaville, he population of seaville,the number of rental stalls or much many mo...
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... Firstly the author has not given the no of population of balmer island and the ...
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...f rental stalls of balmer island. If we dont know the population of balmer island an...
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...he mopeds rented from 50 to 25 mopeds.The author has not even stated the populati...
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...ville or the rental companies and how much mopeds do they gave previously before t...
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... before the reduction law was introduced,the time period of the survey of seaville...
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...the conclusion. Secondly, author has assumed that number of visitors in balme...
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... seavile island would be same in summer.The visitors in seaville can be very less...
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...also be less because of less polulation.So the number of population and visitors i...
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...the number of population and visitors in the island plays an important role in th...
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...portant role as the mopeds of the people who stays there. So we cannot conc...
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...ment as it does not have sufficient data to prove anything as the author has made...
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...arding the populations and the number of mopeds and that there are only mopeds us...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, third, thirdly, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 453.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73509933775 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53871964526 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.348785871965 0.468620217663 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 64.0 22.8473053892 280% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 150.41222269 57.8364921388 260% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 306.428571429 119.503703932 256% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 64.7142857143 23.324526521 277% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 14.4285714286 5.70786347227 253% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 27.0 5.15768463074 523% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321397810143 0.218282227539 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.199914221234 0.0743258471296 269% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757490591239 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104139089254 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0867913679648 0.0628817314937 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.3 14.3799401198 232% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 14.98 48.3550499002 31% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.1 12.197005988 222% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.1 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 12.3882235529 436% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 27.6 11.1389221557 248% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 11.9071856287 235% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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