In this argument, the author stated that a problem which is created by popular form of transportation called 'mopeds'. He assumed that in summer season when population increase in Balmer Island, accident rate is high because of huge number of mopeds. Admittedly following the neighboring island of Seaville's strategy, by reducing number of mopeds, accident rate will be decreased. Stated in this way, the author fails to mention several key points; on the basis of it could be evaluated. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides a little credible support for the author's conclusion. Hence, the argument can be considered unsubstantiated.
First of all, population increases 100,000 during summer season in Balmer Island thus pedestrians meet accident involving mopeds. Here, it is mentioned that the pedestrians meet accident. There might have two reasons, one is lacking of pedestrian's knowledge on transportation rule another is lacking driver's qualification. It must be checked that either qualified people allowed to driving or not.
Secondly, the author’s suggestion is limiting the number of rentals from 50 to 25 per day in summer season. It is not clear for what reason population increases in that particular season. Perhaps it is tourist season and it is a common perception that for more population, more vehicles are need. Without a good transport facility, tourist demand may be decreased which negatively effect in economy. Admittedly mopeds are a popular transportation way in this area. Perhaps tourist may also prefer this type of vehicle for site visiting. If mopeds rental is reduced, then tourist may take it negatively as well it also reflects in their foreign currency which imports in this tourism section. So, it is not a wise idea to reduce rental mopeds. Set aside this strategy, they may think another solution.
Lastly, the author suggests following Seaville's strategy which was enforced in last year. It seems that their target is similar but the root causes may not be same. Perhaps, the number of mopeds is unnecessarily increased in Seaville Island; it should be restricted to avoid accident. In another way, mopeds are popular in Balmer's Island but may be not in Seaville's Island. That's why it did not matter the number of mopeds in Seaville Island. By finding and evaluating the reasons of accidents, solutions should be revealed and implemented by town council in Balmer Island.
In conclusion, the author's argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, author must provide more concrete evidence perhaps by way of reliable detail investigation that why accident occurs in Balmer Island in summer season. Finally, to better evaluate the argument, it would be necessary to know more information about which approaches are sustainable and reduce accident rate.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 452 350
No. of Characters: 2332 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.611 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.159 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.788 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 211 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 141 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.069 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.536 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.272 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.461 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 588, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...vides a little credible support for the authors conclusion. Hence, the argument can be ...
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Line 7, column 375, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...and but may be not in Seavilles Island. Thats why it did not matter the number of mop...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...in Balmer Island. In conclusion, the authors argument is unpersuasive as it stands. ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2400.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 452.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30973451327 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86845476442 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517699115044 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6869592645 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.7142857143 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1428571429 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53571428571 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303058533343 0.218282227539 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791896993882 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102262254047 0.0701772020484 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165540425954 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721755171844 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 98.500998004 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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