In the preceding statement, the writer asserts that reducing the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies would tackle the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. However, it is not entirely logically convincing, when it ignores several certain crucial assumptions.
First, the author could prove any correlations between increasing the population to 100000 during the summer months and increasing the number of accidents. There are many factors could influence the rise of the number of accidents such as the conditions of roads, the awareness of the traffic of people or even the conditions of weather like rain, storm, etc. Moreover, limiting the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies to halve during the summer is not only unpersuasive but also it could make irreversible damage that the author does not consider carefully. When the decreasing number of the moped is adopted, it could lead to the most proportion of people have to fill moped over its capacity which will be a dangerous situation for people.
Second, the argument is not completely sound. The evidence in support of the conclusion is not sufficient to support the conclusion of the argument because maybe annual reduction in moped accidents at the neighboring island of Seaville had several reasons that limiting on moped rental was one of them. 50 percent annual reduction is a significant number that could not be assured just by reducing the number of mopeds rented. The author could illustrate strong examples and could consider other areas that have the same infrastructure and governance, used the same strategy and decreased their accidents. In addition, the author could convince the readers by giving power reasons about the consequence of limiting on moped rentals in recent years among the neighboring island of Seaville.
Moreover, the author should render more information like statistics that prove when increasing the population lead to an increase in the number of mepod rented on the streets. Because the population may be just rising in the summer cause this island attracts more visitors and visitors usually use the grab or walk by foot to move to the number of mopeds rented could not raise too much.
In conclusion, the assertion of the author still has many falls to persuasive the readers. However, the argument might have been strengthened by supporting the evidence that there is a correlation between increasing the population and increasing the number of accidents in the summer on Balmer Island and reinforcement the homogeneous points between 2 islands when mentioning the effective of neighboring island when adopting this law.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 430 350
No. of Characters: 2227 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.554 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.179 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.724 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.02 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.394 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.617 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, then, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2262.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 430.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26046511628 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78068358319 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462790697674 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.5954660081 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.8 119.503703932 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6666666667 23.324526521 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338827584411 0.218282227539 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111699437681 0.0743258471296 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.092369311526 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204021593048 0.128457276422 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364552252173 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.3799401198 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.82 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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