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Budget should be more for advertising.

According to the conclusion of this memo from the advertising director of the super screen movie peoduction company, company should allocate a greater share of budget next year for advertising. However, many points given in the support of the views of the director are not very convincing. Although, there is no doubt that marketing will have their advantages, but author has ignored to mention many important points.

Firstly, fewer audience has reached to super screen produced movies than in any other year, however positive reviews percentage was increased. Abate in audience happened by not only quality of movie they producing but also depends on many other factors. It can also happen that during past year many other big production and hit movies had taken place which results to divert people towards them. so that less people came for super screen movies. Bad atmosphere may took place or any pandemic. Such surrondings should be considered for survey which was ignored.

Secondly, why postive reviews incresed in past year when there was the least number of people? Survey should have considered only postive reviews to maintain their image, also One reason can be a bad quality of movies before the past year. Before the past year production should have made some disaster or flop movies which created a bad image on people for super screen movie production, and leads them to ignore Super Screen Movies. Moreover, depending upon reviews of small quantity of people is not pragmatic approach. Survey of small number of sample often results into miscalculations and wrong decisions.

Thirdly, It is proposed that greater amount budget should be spent on advertising from next year. Spending budget on advertising will not guarantee that number of audience will increase. Also spending large share on marketing can lead to unbalanced financial state, it may happen that to save money they cut budget from movie production and which happen to make flop movies. For example, production which is spending more in marketing than movie can not attarct large number of people. If such amount of money spent on movie production then quality of movie also enhached and attract more people, which(good quality movies) does not require advertising.

All in all, this argument has many loopholes, as the author is talking on the basis of his assumptions. Author has to collect more information and more solid evidence to support his argument.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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According to the conclusion of this memo...
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...ed to mention many important points. Firstly, fewer audience has reached to s...
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...idered for survey which was ignored. Secondly, why postive reviews incresed i...
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...miscalculations and wrong decisions. Thirdly, It is proposed that greater am...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, as to, for example, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 397.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17632241814 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51176321294 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491183879093 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6631057187 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8571428571 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9047619048 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238466789577 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731662574969 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928310695212 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129343804113 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062929272946 0.0628817314937 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, as to, for example, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments