devoting more time for weather an local news
The manager states that old time which was devoted for weather and local news should be restored, and he came to this conclustion because he received complaints from viewers about the station's coverage of weather and local news , also the local businesses have canceled their advertising contracts with the television station. This argument is flawed because it is based on unproved assumptions which require more evidences to strenghen the argument which I will explore in the following essay.
First, the author assumes that by devoting more time for weather an local news more viewers would watch the show since he received comlaints about the coverage of them. This assumption is not necessarily right, maybe the viewers complaints were not about the weather and local news coverage time, maybe it was about the quality of the information provided in that news or maybe it was about the hostess of that news. In oreder to make the argument stronger the manager should provide evidence that the viewers complaints were about weather and local news duration and increasing it would attract more viewers.
Second, the manager must provide an eidence that local businesses have canceled their advertising contracts with the television station because of the duration of weather and local news.This maybe happened for differnt reasons. it is possible that local businesses decided to stop advertising on televsion and start advertising on the internet instead so increasing weather and local news duration in this case will not avoid the station from losing more advertisng revenues.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed because it is based on unsupported assumptions which requore more evidence to make it stronger. the manager have to provide evidence that the viewers comlaints were about short weather and local news duration. And he have to prove that the local businesses canceld their contracts because of the weather and local news duration.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The manager states that old time which was devoted for weather and local news should be restored, and he came to this conclustion because he received complaints from viewers about the station's coverage of weather and local news , also the local businesses have canceled their advertising contracts with the television station.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: conclustion Suggestion: conclusion
Sentence: This argument is flawed because it is based on unproved assumptions which require more evidences to strenghen the argument which I will explore in the following essay.
Error: strenghen Suggestion: strengthen
Sentence: First, the author assumes that by devoting more time for weather an local news more viewers would watch the show since he received comlaints about the coverage of them.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: comlaints Suggestion: complaints
Sentence: In oreder to make the argument stronger the manager should provide evidence that the viewers complaints were about weather and local news duration and increasing it would attract more viewers.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: oreder Suggestion: order
Sentence: Second, the manager must provide an eidence that local businesses have canceled their advertising contracts with the television station because of the duration of weather and local news.This maybe happened for differnt reasons. it is possible that local businesses decided to stop advertising on televsion and start advertising on the internet instead so increasing weather and local news duration in this case will not avoid the station from losing more advertisng revenues.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: differnt Suggestion: different
Error: advertisng Suggestion: advertising
Error: eidence Suggestion: evidence
Error: televsion Suggestion: television
Sentence: In conclusion, the argument is flawed because it is based on unsupported assumptions which requore more evidence to make it stronger. the manager have to provide evidence that the viewers comlaints were about short weather and local news duration.
Error: requore Suggestion: require
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: comlaints Suggestion: complaints
Sentence: And he have to prove that the local businesses canceld their contracts because of the weather and local news duration.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: canceld Suggestion: cancel
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 312 350
No. of Characters: 1619 1500
No. of Different Words: 119 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.203 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.189 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.527 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.819 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.57 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.762 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.259 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 185, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'stations'' or 'station's'?
Suggestion: stations'; station's
...eived complaints from viewers about the stations coverage of weather and local news , al...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 228, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...tions coverage of weather and local news , also the local businesses have canceled...
^^
Line 3, column 66, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... that by devoting more time for weather an local news more viewers would watch the...
^^
Line 3, column 66, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'local news'.
Suggestion: local news
... that by devoting more time for weather an local news more viewers would watch the show since...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 187, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
... the duration of weather and local news.This maybe happened for differnt reasons. it...
^^^^
Line 5, column 229, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...is maybe happened for differnt reasons. it is possible that local businesses decid...
^^
Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...uore more evidence to make it stronger. the manager have to provide evidence that t...
^^^
Line 7, column 256, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...weather and local news duration. And he have to prove that the local businesses canc...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 311.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29903536977 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57669982449 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 204.123752495 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.395498392283 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.0 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.4962014385 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.8 119.503703932 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.1 23.324526521 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.467157013855 0.218282227539 214% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.218267842301 0.0743258471296 294% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128352391679 0.0701772020484 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.316852404566 0.128457276422 247% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689982879869 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 14.3799401198 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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