"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
This argument asserts that the company has to reduce the work hour of all three work shifts by one hour to secure enough time for employees to sleep sufficiently because tired workers are likely to cause on-site accidents, which reduce the productivity. It seems reasonable at first glance; however, the argument depends on several unsubstantiated assumptions and is, therefore, unpersuasive as it stands.
The memo claims that Quiot Manufacturing has 30% more on-site accidents than Panoply industries plant because of the longer work hours per shift based on the research conducted in last year. There are two flawed assumptions in this claim: First, the one-year study may not provide enough evidence to draw the conclusion that which factory has fewer accidents during the particular year. Second, comparing the length of work shifts and the absolute number of the accidents occurred at both factories in the last year is irrelevant unless thorough investigation was performed to analyze the overall work environment such as the machine maintenance status.
Furthermore, the claim cited the expert said that workers with fatigue and insufficient sleep are more likely to cause industrial accidents. The problem in this assumption is that the author took only the conclusion from the expert’s study and ignored other factors that the experts may have controlled during the research. In the memo, the vice president blames the worker’s fatigue degree as the main factor of on-site accidents in the factory; however, it is also possible there are other reasons contributed to accidents such as lack of proper training for workers.
Moreover, the claim asserts that employees will get more sleep if the company abridge the length of each shift. However, no one knows whether the workers actually sleep more with an additional hour. It is possible that the employees spend an extra hour on doing their own hobbies. The company is able to change the length of work time, but it does have no control over what its employees do during their spare time.
Lastly, reducing the number of on-site accidents doesn’t necessarily increase the effectiveness. In fact, accidents in the factory may not be the only reason for sluggish productivity. Many on-the-job accidents do slow down the flow of the factory; however, by eliminating the factor of accident, the company may not get the productivity increase as it expected. There are many factors besides the accident rate in order for the company to improve factory effectiveness, such as the machine condition in the manufacturing lines.
In conclusion, based on the unwarranted assumptions mentioned above, the argument fails to provide enough evidence that the reducing number of accidents will increase productivity. Unless the argument presents more specific data on the factors differentiate two factories, how the cited experts performed their research, or the employee surveys about the reducing work time, it lacks logical reasoning and evidence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, as to, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2554.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 474.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38818565401 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86202876887 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491561181435 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 789.3 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9587976257 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.888888889 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 5.70786347227 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2371601395 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743369026924 0.0743258471296 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688738604988 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117810488155 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674460904016 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 475 350
No. of Characters: 2471 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.668 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.202 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.735 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 149 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.389 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.172 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.614 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5