The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the
nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that
significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among
workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase
productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get
adequate amounts of sleep.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be
sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the
argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
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The memo assumes that taking an hour off from each workshift at Quiot manufacturing has a significant
chance to reduce the number on the job accidents. The opponents have come to this conclusion based
on assumption that Panoply Industries plant has less accidents due to shorter workshifts. Before
recommendations can be evaluated ,there are a couple of assumptions that need to be analized.
However, if the writer of the recommendation is correct in assuming that the Panoply industries plant
had less job accidents, the information does not say anything about the number of workers, the kind of
processes and the level chance of having an accident in both places. Perhaps, Quiot manufacturing
applies machines and processes that involve hard work or chances for accidents and Panoply plant does
not. Perhaps what they produce or the service they offer is different from each other. If either of these
scenarios are worth, then the conclusion in the main argument is weakened.
According to the argument, the reason people need that extra hour is because they are fatigue and
sleep deprived. Experts of this suggestion assume that workers at Quiot Manufacturing are sleep
deprived and tired. However this might not be the case. Perhaps they spend nights at parties or have
another job that deprives them from sleeping. Further, leaving work one our earlier, does not guarantee
they will go to rest or sleep. If the above is true,then the argument is not valid.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now is consideraawed because is relying on several
unwarranted assumptions. If we assume that all of the assbly flumptions are true, then it will be
necessary to draw the conclusion that workers will have no accidents if their shift gets shorter one hour.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 292 350
No. of Characters: 1440 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.134 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.932 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.721 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.208 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.515 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.068 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 49, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun accidents is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ption that Panoply Industries plant has less accidents due to shorter workshifts. Be...
^^^^
Line 4, column 33, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...Before recommendations can be evaluated ,there are a couple of assumptions that n...
^^
Line 11, column 67, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
... the reason people need that extra hour is because they are fatigue and sleep deprived. E...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 21, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...acturing are sleep deprived and tired. However this might not be the case. Perhaps the...
^^^^^^^
Line 15, column 52, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , then
...o to rest or sleep. If the above is true,then the argument is not valid. In conclusi...
^^^^^
Line 17, column 44, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...arranted assumptions. If we assume that all of the assbly flumptions are true, then it wil...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 291.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15807560137 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80739398954 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556701030928 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.2749089149 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.066666667 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 18.0 5.15768463074 349% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237110463179 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069978317733 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718454038048 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0690062469302 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673711699847 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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