In any field - business, politics, education, government - those in power should be required to step down after five years.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Business, politics, education and government require very skilled leaders. In fact, serving for a long time might bring the need for changes and their replacement with other experts. The prompt recommends that those in power should be required to step down after five years. In my opinion, I do not agree with this idea and argue that five years are quite not enough for leaders to apply their abilities for some reasons.
First, being a leader requires one to have expertise on what they are doing. Thus, reaching the top takes time, effort and money. The above factors puts leaders under pressure to justify all these and do be on lead as long as they can. For example, one can be a businessman or a teacher after finishing a school. In order to be a leader of a company or a director of a school one has to has to go through more steps and has to have experience to face the challenges of being a leader. Even in the government, in order to get a leading position, one cannot be catapulted to the top of the “stairs” but has in fact to take the steps one by one. Consequently, there is a balance in leading positions. Even these leaders take responsibility when acting. However, feeling the pressure makes them do their best in order to keep their positions. Furthermore, those in power, if being good leaders and progressing why to step down?
Further, Even if we assume that leaders should not stay in that position for more than five years, preparing new leaders will not be of inters, if knowing that position will last just for a short time. For example, if a director used to be a teacher and had his own class when he comes in lead for a short time he misses the routine of being in class. All the training as a leader will not serve after he goes back as a teacher. Research has shown that leaders when given a short time to lead tend to get corrupted, and profit as much as they cannot in a honest way. In other words, if given more chances they will try to do their best in order to get reelected. Thus, a limit of five years opens the door for corruption and neglecting responsibilities. One need to look at how a some countries give leaders a longer time in power.
Of course some argue that in our increasingly competitive economy and society, good leading skills are decisive. The leaders should not be dropped from powers in five years because this does not justify their energy spent for this position, and gives a chance to neglect the importance of their powers. They will not do the best they can and it is going to be not easy to replace them with good leaders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 148, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[2]
Message: You should probably use 'put'.
Suggestion: put
...me, effort and money. The above factors puts leaders under pressure to justify all t...
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Line 2, column 380, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'has to'.
Suggestion: has to
...a company or a director of a school one has to has to go through more steps and has to have e...
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Line 2, column 387, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'have'.
Suggestion: have
...ny or a director of a school one has to has to go through more steps and has to hav...
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Line 3, column 551, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a honest way" with adverb for "honest"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...pted, and profit as much as they cannot in a honest way. In other words, if given more chances ...
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Line 3, column 554, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...d, and profit as much as they cannot in a honest way. In other words, if given mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, look, so, thus, as to, for example, in fact, of course, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 476.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44957983193 5.05705443957 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49151869732 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468487394958 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9595539379 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.25 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70833333333 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181843611464 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621159546753 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628455505048 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129940577859 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515440137232 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 14.1392134831 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 12.1639044944 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.