Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Modern society is facing many changes and sometimes these are many problems that may need smart solutions. In fact, globalization has caused that all people face problems and get affected by them soon or later. The prompt recommends that different issues cannot be solved by laws and the legal system because people’s heart cannot be ruled and changed by laws. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this argument for several reasons.
Firstly, the legal system and laws are one of the branches of the government and it is the foundation of order for a country. As we know the three branches need to work in accordance and in balance for the good of their subjects. For example, laws were invented very long ago and are a sign of civilization. The history has proven that countries with a strong legal system ruled longer and flourished .They were inspiration for the next generations and their governments to rule by laws and a good legal system. This is similar to the road systems that help people connect and live a normal life. Without structure, life of citizens is a constant chaos and this may lead to mass abuse.
Secondly, laws facilitate the life of a nation by controlling and reassuring the public interest is protected. The good and evil go together and there needs to be a balance. People need protection from not right actions that some groups or individuals might take against others. For example, what some people find good for their heart, it might hurt somebody else. Further, even if we assume that laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds one still has to act according to the laws, because there is no other choice than the laws. People may find laws cruel, but they can find comfort in other places or ways, like family, church or other communities. Research has shown that rules and laws as the highest from the importance are needed everywhere to make things run smoothly. Even a family, a classroom or a school cannot last without these especially when disagreements happen.
Of course , some argue that in our increasingly globalized world laws are not needed and heart should rule. If we do so, we are likely to fail the peace and order. Just like the roof of a house needs tiles to protect it from sun and rain, people need laws to protect them in good and trouble days.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...metimes these are many problems that may need smart solutions. In fact, globaliza...
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Line 2, column 400, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...legal system ruled longer and flourished .They were inspiration for the next gener...
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Line 2, column 402, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
...gal system ruled longer and flourished .They were inspiration for the next generatio...
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Line 4, column 840, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ily, a classroom or a school cannot last without these especially when disagreeme...
^^
Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ly when disagreements happen. Of course , some argue that in our increasingly glo...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, as to, for example, in fact, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 407.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70761670762 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47040829566 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538083538084 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.8864045796 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.2380952381 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.380952381 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243211081287 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693944764654 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674446017371 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158111526861 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084653823152 0.0667264976115 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...metimes these are many problems that may need smart solutions. In fact, globaliza...
^^
Line 2, column 400, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...legal system ruled longer and flourished .They were inspiration for the next gener...
^^
Line 2, column 402, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
...gal system ruled longer and flourished .They were inspiration for the next generatio...
^^^^
Line 4, column 840, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ily, a classroom or a school cannot last without these especially when disagreeme...
^^
Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ly when disagreements happen. Of course , some argue that in our increasingly glo...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, as to, for example, in fact, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 407.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70761670762 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47040829566 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538083538084 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.8864045796 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.2380952381 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.380952381 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243211081287 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693944764654 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674446017371 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158111526861 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084653823152 0.0667264976115 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.