"A new medical test that allows the early detection of a particular disease will prevent the deaths of people all over the world who would otherwise die from the disease. The test has been extremely effective in allowing doctors to diagnose the disease six months to a year before it would have been spotted by conventional means. As The director of the International Health Foundation recently released this announcement:
soon as we can institute this test as a routine procedure in hospitals around the world, the death rate from this disease will plummet."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author of the announcement concludes that the death rate from the disease will decrease.However, that conclusion is based on a number of inadequate assumptions. Without some further information we do not have enough evidence to determine whether the director’s proclamation is valid. Nowadays, people are facing many challenges regarding health and this has been time and money consuming.
First, one should have more information about the symptoms and causes of the disease. Misunderstanding these and not knowing in advance actions how to prevent could result in fatality. It is possible that genetics might play a role as well. Perhaps, intensive campaigns that notify people how to halt and steps to take in case of getting affected by this problem. Moreover, people around the world are facing many challenges regarding health and this is one more to handle among others. Secondly, the director could provide some information about the cost and risks of doing this test there. If the hospitals do this cost free, and guarantee no side dangers, then more people might take steps toward doing this. Perhaps, the Health Foundation still has not enough information about the procedures of institutionalizing and recognizes only the importance and the benefits one can get from this test.
Thirdly, more proof is needed about the one’s survival rate of this disease. Maybe the test concludes that one is sick and this sickness has a low survival rate. Perhaps there were no symptoms at all, that could tell one is sick. Sometimes the problem may not be able to be discovered on time due to the doctor’s inability to detect it and wrong evaluations of the process.
To conclude, there is a long procedure ahead, starting from making people and the government aware of this spreading illness that could be caught on time if measures are taken on a timely basis. In addition, one needs to be informed about all the costs and benefits of this test. In terms of this, there are still many questions to be answered before we conclude that this test will be applied all over the world and the death rate from this sickness will
drop.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 359 350
No. of Characters: 1736 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.353 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.836 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.587 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.895 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.752 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.297 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.348 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 93, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ath rate from the disease will decrease.However, that conclusion is based on a number o...
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Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aking people and the government aware of this spreading illness that could be cau...
^^
Line 5, column 456, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d the death rate from this sickness will drop.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, well, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 358.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98882681564 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73986324434 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513966480447 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9505875084 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2222222222 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133093520651 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0430471606282 0.0743258471296 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411086332348 0.0701772020484 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0894058204313 0.128457276422 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324511974449 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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