Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall stu

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Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The author argues that for allowing its graduates to held a better future they must terminate the student evaluation of the professors. The fails to mention several key factors which could help to evaluate it better. To support the argument, author reasons that, if the students evaluation will be banished than the professors would not likely provide students with the more marks. Thus, as an outcome the true results will be reflected. The above argument if filled with the loopholes. So, it cannot provide enough evidence to suggest the mentioned conclusion by the author.

Firstly, it is assumed that the professor are providing higher grades to the students since the procedure of the student evaluation was implemented. There is no information about the grading system befor the implementation of the new system of evaluating the teaching effectiveness of professors by their students. It is possible that the professors were leniently checking grading the students even before the introduction of the new assessing system. It is also possible that the students really deserved these grades. Thus, there is no support to the assumption and the data is incompetent to come to such a conclusion.

Secondly, arguments contends that there is a 30% rise in the grades of the students, it lacks the informatoin about what was the base used to measure the grades. Changing the base also changes the grades. Also, there is a chance that students might be deserving such a score. Being, possible that the implementation of the new method might have increased the teaching qualities of the professors. Also, it is not stated clearly whether, the 30% rise in grades is according to their previous grades? Is it according to the total marks of all the students with the base of the number of students? Whether, the increament in the grades are the students of any particular faculty or of the whole university? Thus, there are many flaws about the statistical entry and author must clearify them for proper assessment of the conclusion.

The analogy with the Alpha University also raises many queries about the conclusion, such as, before the implementation of the new evaluation policy were the students of the Omega University successful at getting jobs? Did they get better placement than the Alpha University Students or not? Also, the image of both the universites according to the employers before the implementation of the new policy must be known for the further analysis of the comparison that is done. There is a possibility that the students of Alpha University were not successful in getting jobs, which is not clearly stated and thus, it gives rise to such doubts. So, the author must clearify these queries in order to better deem the argument.

In conclusion the author's argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide with clear and concrete data, perhaps by the way of detailed analysis of the reasons for the increament of the grades. Finally, to better assess the the above mentioned argument it would be necessary to know more about the information relating the assumption of increasing of the grades, about statistical inference which provides strong evidence and also the analogy which has an credible evidence for the argument of the author to make a strong point.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...factors which could help to evaluate it better. To support the argument, author reason...
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...students of any particular faculty or of the whole university? Thus, there are ma...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'really', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'by the way']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.239202657807 0.25644967241 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.144518272425 0.15541462614 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0730897009967 0.0836205057962 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0531561461794 0.0520304965353 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0299003322259 0.0272364105082 110% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12292358804 0.125424944231 98% => OK
Participles: 0.046511627907 0.0416121511921 112% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78767141893 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.031561461794 0.026700313972 118% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.159468438538 0.113004496875 141% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0215946843854 0.0255425247493 85% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00996677740864 0.0127820249294 78% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3335.0 2731.13054187 122% => OK
No of words: 548.0 446.07635468 123% => OK
Chars per words: 6.08576642336 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83832613839 4.57801047555 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.375912408759 0.378187486979 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.297445255474 0.287650121315 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.217153284672 0.208842608468 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.13503649635 0.135150697306 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78767141893 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 207.018472906 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.410583941606 0.469332199767 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.759378614 52.1807786196 92% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 20.039408867 135% => OK
Sentence length: 20.2962962963 23.2022227129 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8585492049 57.7814097925 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.518518519 141.986410481 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2962962963 23.2022227129 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.481481481481 0.724660767414 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 3.58251231527 223% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 50.0408218437 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.79562043796 1.8405768891 98% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304546718321 0.441005458295 69% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.145263059905 0.135418324435 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0905839434323 0.0829849096947 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.621846408954 0.58762219726 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.171475162376 0.147661913831 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139061695199 0.193483328276 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586143456149 0.0970749176394 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.690397248137 0.42659136922 162% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0799653712222 0.0774707102158 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23281156223 0.312017818177 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454880714712 0.0698173142475 65% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.82512315271 166% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.82389162562 248% => OK
Total topic words: 23.0 14.657635468 157% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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